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ccilia   
Oct 25, 2010
Graduate / "the differences of the economics" - master of finance, interest in the program [4]

my ps question is :share what interests you in this program and what you plan to get out of attending this program. Your post-education goals are of interest to the admission committee.

i am an international student and i wanna know whether i have made myself clear in the ps,i wanna know what you can know about my characteristics.

i wanna know whether i have answer the questions the school asked.
i know there are also many grammar errors there, thank you for your reply.

"ccs portfolilo has improved by 5% in market value, Zhu's has improved by 3%, so for this round cc has won. Let's welcome her to share her experience with us!" It was the announcement moment in the "Better Portfolio" competition between my friends and I. Whilst learning some analytical skills in class, we decided to apply what we had learned into reality. I(WE?) have encoutered many problems, sometimes I just made the portfolio worse. As our competition was known by more people, I didn't work alone anymore, 3 more people joined me to improve our portfolio. I learnt my partners' advantages and assigned them to? different tasks. Though there were always some disagreements between us, after further analyses and discussion, we improved our portfolio.

I feel full of satisfaction when I can use my analyses to make others agree with me. I am always dreaming of to be an analyst. Work out the Return On Investment of a specific company, and give advices to my clients to make the right decision. After comprehending all the analytical methods and different kinds of finacial instruments, I will be an excellent fund manager. I will make out the investment plan, lead my team to make a perfect portfolio, and benefit the investors. Though China is developing fast while the financial market is still in the primary stage. Most people lack the ability and the consciousness to manage their money and to make their money grow. I want to make a difference by my efforts.

However, I found that a further education is necessary for me to pursue my dream. I find your school the best choice, because the courses can equip me with the modern finance theory and application. The co-curricular activities also offer me the opportunity to communicate with leaders in the field, and thus can help me to know the weakness of myself and to improve myself. Besides, I like the environment very different from othersbecause your school is a seven-college community. What's more, your motto "learn today and lead tomorrow" matches my goal to be a fund manager, I believe your program won't disappoint me. I also want to contribute what I know and have experienced.

I believe my analytical skills, the ability to learn new things quickly, my fondness of communicating with others and learning from everyone will assist me to quickly merge successfully into your school.

thank you again
ccilia   
Oct 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "My goal is to establish an exquisite fashion line and donate" - Temple essay [14]

your desire for fashion is strongly presented in the passage, so is your goal.
i think you can abridge some sentences in the middle part, and stress out the most important thing to you, the thing that influenced you the most.

and i think what your write about your experiences should be more related to your dream~~
above is what i think, maybe not quite right

wish you good luck~~fighting~~O(∩_∩)O~
ccilia   
Dec 29, 2010
Graduate / "committee in charge of the academic branch" - A story of me which influenced me [2]

The question is:Throughout our lives, we have significant experiences or "milestones" that have a lasting impact on us. Briefly describe such an event and its impact on you.

Standing in front of my classmates, I saw the confuseness, the unfamiliarness in their eyes. I know I was almost like a stranger to them even we had been classmates for about one month. I calmed myself down and started my speech for the election of the leader in charge of student academic branch:" I am Xiru Chen. I guess that most of the class don't know me, and saw me few times. I sat in the back row in class. I had few talks with only some of my classmates.At first, I owed all of these to the school arrangements-I live in different dormitory building. I felt I was abandoned. I can't live with you, can't gossip the latest news about the class in the dormitory. I can't discuss the topics in the class with you. I was like a blind and a deaf in class affairs. Later, I know that I was just afraid that you won't talk to me if I talk first. However, this situation was totally opposite to what I thought before I entered the class. I promised to myself that I will be a new person, I want to be friends with you. So, today, I am here to elective the position-committee in charge of the academic branch. Though I havn't done this position before, I had learnt a lot from my former committees. What's more, I can take advantage of being a student in this school for two more years than you. I know better about the academic systems. I want to have a chance to know you and be known by you. I will do my best to faciliate you, to serve you!"

From that day on , I started my duty as the leader in charge of the academic. One of my main job is to convey information to the class correctly and opportunely. I, at first, sometimes forgot to tell some details. In order to deal with this better, I think holistically before an announcement, I tried to know all the details and think out the answers the questions my class may ask me. I started to drop by my classmates' dormitories, finished the teamwork with them, chatted with them and had fun together. During conversations, I sensed that there was a disappointment among the class in one course. Many people felt that one of our teachers seemed as if he was teaching to himself. He cared little about the student's feedbacks. Sometimes he taught so fast that most students can't get his ideas. I know that was harmful to both the teacher and the students. And it reminded me that I should pay more attetion to the need of the class. Considering that my class consists of different major students, some have learnt basic economic courses, while others haven't, there would be a disagreement about the progress rate. So I held a meeting asking the feedbacks about all the teachers. After collected the information, I summarized the most essential problems and communicated with the teachers about the special situation in our class and the feedbacks from the students. The teachers were glad that I can organize such a meeting and helped them in better teaching. I got some advice from the teachers about some specific courses and the learning methods. There is an improvement in the class ambience. The relationship between the students and the teacher became closer. I also created a mailbox to report the questions and suggestions about the courses and to upload some useful information. All my classmates appreciate my behavior. The friendly environment help us learn more from our teachers. They sometimes are more like friends to us, rather than like teachers.Now, I am also called the "Problem-Solver". They always come to me to find a help when they encouter some difficulties. Don't know where to register for the new course, ask for my help. Don't know which decision to make, they ask my advice.I share their happiness and sorrows. We talked heart to heart. I have been trsuted and relied on.

In the end of the semster, I was rewarded as one of the two Excellent Leader in class. Again, I stood in front of my classmates to summarize my performance. I was still nervous but now more confident:"I really appreciate the opportunity you give me to fufill my promise. What I did this semster are tiny things, but I learnt a lot from these. I became more patient, more careful and more attentive. And now I know that I shouldn't waste my time trying to change the settled situation. Instead, I should think more about what I can change. I should live it and adapt to it. I should trust myself and always stay true to myself. If we want to chang the status quo, all we need to do is conquer the inner fear, step out, and try our best. Then we will find that we can make a difference."

Hope you can understand what my story is, and I want to hear your suggestion about the essay, do you like it? what do you know about me ?

Thank you so much ~~
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