Writing Feedback / Leaders that had effect on the world [5]

please give me a feedback about this assay, I know there are some dictating mistakes in it since its my first time writing a practice assay for the TOEFL exam, but I wanted to post it as I wrote it in the practice test :

Q: write about one of the leaders that had effect on the world...

King Al-Hussain ben Talal was the king of the Hashemite kingdom of Jordan from the middle of the 1900s until the beginning of the 1990s. During the time he was the king of jordan he made a great achievements and contributions in his country and the middle east region as a whole.

When he became a king, their was many social and political problems that encounter Jordan, the most important issue was the crisis between the arab countries and Israel, the two parties was in a state of war, as a result there were a large number of palestenians that had lost their homes in the war. King Hussain welcomed the palestenian refugees to Jordan, and allow them to live and work freely by giving them rights almost equally to the jordanians.

In addition, he made a significant ecomonical improvements, resulting in a lowering the prices on the goods and products for the citizens, and making the jordan dinar currency rate increasing continously in 1980s, thus, the poor percentage has been decreased in the jordanian community. This period of time was called the "golden period of jordan". He also encouraged education strongly, by founding "the university of Jordan" which was the first university in the modern Jordan history, from which many jordanian entrepreneurs had graduated.

Moreover, king Hussain was a very diplomatic leader who made a friendly relationships with all neighbour countries, including the former enemy of the Jordan "Israel". he has made a treaty with the Israelean side that ended the state of war between the two countries. Also he made a good relationships with most westren countries including the united states and european countries.

Until the end of his life King Hussain's most important consideration was the jordanian people and how to improve their life in every aspect possible.

Writing Feedback / (flexibility / tactfulness / fairness) important qualities of a good supervisor [5]

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In my opinion, there are several qualities that a good boss should have. According to my personal experience, three points summarize the most important characteristics that a good manager must have. First, the manager should not be too flexible, neither too strict all the time. The professional supervisor should know when the situation requires him to be flexible in dealing with his subordinates and identify the time in which he/she should be serious. For example, the manager who tend to should show an understanding attitude when one of his employees gets to work late because of an urgent incident that happened with him, will raise his employees' loyality and respect. On the other hand, he/she should not tolerate a slow work progress in a project which its deadline is approaching soon. In addition, a good supervisor should respect his team members point of view, even if it is contradicting with his opinion, he/she should not try to impose his perspective without discussing it with his co-workers and explaining the advantages of his ideas, in that way the other employees will have respect for this manager and trust his work methodology. Finally, objectivity and fairness is a very essential trait for a boss, a good boss should be fair, treat each of his co-workers in the same respectful way, without differentiating them in treatment, regardless of the gender, position or age of the employee who is dealing with. By doing so, the supervisor will gain trust and admiration of all the people in the work place. In conclusion, the good boss who is understanding, respecting others opinions and treating every co-worker equally, will influence the performance of his/her subordinate and create a competitive enjoyable atmosphere at the work place, making everyone enjoying the work time period instead of feeling stressed or bored.