Graduate / Information Technology tools like Computers and the Internet -SOP study in the UK [2]

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My career interests lie in the ability to effectively create world-class solutions to technical and business needs using Information Technology tools like Computers and the Internet. This informs my desire to pursue a post-graduate program in Computing and International Business having completed a 5-year undergraduate Bachelor of Engineering degree program in Computer Engineering at Covenant University, Ota, Nigeria in June 2008.

With my academic background and work experiences in different but related IT fields, I desire to develop new skills and gain knowledge that will help me achieve my career objectives of becoming a business-aware IT professional. I have been involved in networking, hardware installation and maintenance, telecommunications and recently web design and maintenance. I hope to get the chance to develop further in these technical skills while being able to hone such skills with some business/management expertise so I can become proficient in delivering solutions that will improve results of any business/industry problems I tackle.

I believe that ultimately, the program will help me further understand the concepts of computing, information technology, software development, management principles, the global business environment and international commerce.

I know the U.K. boasts of some of the world's best institutions for computing studies. These institutions provide intellectually stimulating environment with good facilities that meet modern day specifications. Academic programs in such institutions are usually well structured and based on recent trends due to their links with major industry players and the continuous research work being carried out by staff. It will be a privilege to pursue my post-graduate studies with financial assistance at one of such institutions. I hope to do the best I can to compete favourably with other excellent talents I will be schooling with.

Scholarship / 'Business practices in Nigeria, A benefit to your home country essay' [2]

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A master's degree in Computing with International Business will play a vital role in my quest to be an agent of change in my country. It will be very useful in the delivery of my plans which will aid development in Nigeria upon my return.

A large number of business practices in Nigeria have not evolved with the changing times. I have noticed that the information technology tools needed to make business endeavours achieve their goals are either not considered necessary or poorly implemented if used; this makes it difficult for such business to provide quality service or function globally. Nigeria as a country is interested in the growth and sustainability of her local businesses and the improved service delivery of the multinationals. I believe a great percentage of this can be achieved if young talents and professionals who are interested in helping to sustain a viable economy create solutions that will ultimately improve efficiency. I believe one of the most important solutions in this respect is the proper fusion of IT with business.

I desire that the skills I acquire from the postgraduate qualification will help me put computing, information technology, software development and the business and management concepts learned into action by introducing new technologies that will support business functions and increase productivity. I have found that businesses with well fashioned IT solutions are more likely to deliver the impression of good quality service to consumers and hence grow. For instance, an ambiguous flight booking website of the best airline company will deter passengers if they realise they can get another airline company that is almost as good but with an uncomplicated booking website. I want to achieve the use of IT in business because I expect that it will help in improving productivity while reducing costs by making electronic communications possible, keeping information efficiently, managing persons or offices remotely, marketing and selling products easily and making tedious work processes simpler.

I hope that my input into various business units will go a long way in preparing and reshaping the Nigerian economy for the international business sphere.