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Nov 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "From Vietnam to the US" Family, UC prompt #1 - "motivation" [3]

I really like the personal voice you put in to this essay. I can really tell this is the true Lam speaking to me as I read this. The only thing I would suggest is look through for gramatical mistakes. you have a few comma splices in the first paragraph. Also, instead of using the word sibling, use the word "sister.'

Good Luck
mpleleaf04   
Nov 28, 2010
Writing Feedback / What government can do to conserve energy resources? [5]

Yes, all these are all ways that the government can promote energy conversation. what you must ask yourself, however, are all these potential solutions viable? Where does the money come from? How will these projects be funded? You also must take in to account interest groups. Oil companies play a huge role in our government and have a large say in our country's energy policy.

I agree with all your potential solutions and these are great ideas.
mpleleaf04   
Nov 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "To simulate life after schooling" - Davidson Supplemental Essay on the Honor Code [4]

The prompt is Davidson is an academically and socially engaged community bound by an Honor Code and committed tothoughtful discourse and an abiding sense of inclusiveness. Reflecting on your own background and educationalexperience, in what ways is Davidson a good match and how might you enrich this community?

The Honor Code can be excerpted simply:Each Davidson student is honor bound to refrain
from stealing, lying about college business, and cheating on academic work... Cheating includes plagiarism... Each Davidson student is honor bound to report immediately all violations of the Honor Code of which the student has first-hand knowledge; failure to do so shall be a violation of the Honor Code.

Here is my essay, your comments, advice, and edits would be greatly appreciated.

Ever since I first started taking graded assessments there has always been someone watching over me. Throughout my schooling experiences, there has always been an assumption that students are going to do everything in their power to cheat or get an upper hand on their peers. Having witnessed students cheating first hand, I understand why many of my teachers have this mentality that cheating is inevitable and that all students are capable of completing fraudulent work. Although I understand these concerns, I also believe that this watchdog mentality I have encountered since middle school does not prepare students for the world outside of homework, papers, and tests. I believe that the honor code at Davidson creates an environment which simulates life after schooling.

In many ways cheating is a societal problem just like many other crimes such as stealing. Cheating is like most crimes, if you cheat once, chances are you are going to cheat again. Just like any other offense, you probably will not get caught the first time, but eventually, you will be caught in the act. I am a firm believer that things work out the way they are supposed to and the honor code at Davidson also allows for problems like academic fraud to work themselves out. The honor code is not directly going to stop anyone from cheating; however, there is no reason to cheat in an academic environment like Davidson's where there is a mutual trust between the school and students. I feel that if I were to cheat, I would not only be hurting myself, but also insulting my professors for the trust they invested in me.

It is in this way that Davidson provides a unique opportunity for me. The honor code allows for a learning environment that rewards students who are hard working and honest. As a Davidson student, I will add to the Davidson community by putting forth effort in everything I am involved with, from the tennis court to the classroom, while maintaining the integrity the Davidson community stands for. The honor code is not just something I will follow for four years and then forget about the moment I graduate. It is something I will carry with me for the rest of my life and incorporate in to life after college. The extension of the honor code in to life after Davidson is what creates a feeling of enduring inclusiveness. The Davidson honor code in my eyes is not only about social and academic integrity while at the school, but also the veracity of the life you live after Davidson.

THANKS
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