Writing Feedback / Factory farming food. Your opinion about what it's better to eat. [5]

In the age, when wide variety of foods are available, many people prefer consuming food manufactured locally to mass produced, exported food. In this essay I will give my opinion towards this decision.

Never start off an essay this way. The reader already knows what your writing about if the prompt is provided. If it isn't, then your first sentence should be a thesis that takes a stand on the issue.

First of all, products, especially foods produced by a local farmer from a neighborhood are usually fresh, whereas exported goods are always experience a long-distance route, which probablytake a point of view and stick to it. be sure of yourself. worsens their quality. Quite often, people suffer from low qualitative y foods, and as a consequence they get ill. This will provokes awareness andin people and will make sure that they are eating safe and fresh food. Moreover, if to think more specifically, their decision to consume locally produced food can lead to the economic development of that area. Farmers and manufacturers will be encouraged to produce more goods and will have resources to improve the quality.

On the other hand, I think mass-produced products go through serious inspections,because many people will use these products, and foods are not an exception. Before exporting and receiving "factory farming" foods, they test them for safety and freshness. Another thing to mention is that food in enormous amounts is also usually cheaper than the locally grown varietygenerated ones . As to the long distance travel of factory foods, I could say that nowadays,that with the implementation of advanced technologies, transporting goods is very unlikelyrarely will result in the deteriorateion of their quality. For example, huge fridges are installed on the trucks and ships, which guarantee the initial appearance of food.

You really need to pick a side. Jumping back and forth doesn't flow well.

To summarize, I have an impression that buying and eating local foods is good when determining their quality, whereas people with strong consideration about the costs will most probably prefer factory made foods. Besides, products from factory are available all year round. 280 words ( 50minutes )

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Undergraduate / "My most influential teacher" a Virginia tech application essay [5]

Thanks for the input. I also felt the ending needed something.