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heaven850   
Jul 26, 2011
Graduate / "finding a cure for cancer to ending world hunger" - PA Narrative [5]

Thank you very much for taking the time out to help me:

This is where I belong. It seems like everything I've done has lead up to this moment in my life. As early as I can remember I have wanted a career in medicine. I've always had an affinity for helping those in need; couple this with my fascination for medicine and my career path evolved.

As a first generation college graduate my family wanted me to do everything from finding a cure for cancer to ending world hunger. There was however, a general understanding that I would do something in the health field. In college I was uncertain of which health career I wanted to pursue. At that point in my life the only medical careers I knew of where either a doctor or a nurse. Both occupations piqued my interest but I didn't feel completely committed to either. When my grandmother had a heart attack I was introduced to Physical Therapy. I was amazed with the level of patient to provider interaction and with the level of compassion and understanding the PT exhibited. I decided to shadow a PT and realized that while this was a great profession, it wasn't one that completely met my career goals. This experience showed me new possibilities in health care.

After college I took some time out to figure out what direction I wanted to go. I wanted a career that allowed me to practice medicine in various disciplines but also afforded the luxury of spending quality time with family. I began working with a company named xxxxx as a certified Surgical Laser Operator. My job was to manage laser equipment in the operating room while the doctor performed the surgery. It was here that I was able to see the independent yet cohesive role of a physician assistant. It was the first time that I realized that patient care is a collaborative effort. Assisting surgeons as they worked was the most exhilarating experience for me. I would stretch and contort my body to make sure that I had a clear view of the surgery. I felt so privileged to be in an OR. All I remember thinking is "this is where I belong". The doctors and PAs recognized my interest and curiosity. Before long they were explaining conditions to me, making sure I had a clear view, and speaking with me almost as if I their colleague. I wanted nothing more than to be a part of the team. I knew that I wanted that feeling to last for life.

After relocating to xxxx for my husband's job I began looking more into the PA profession. I began shadowing a PA to solidify my decision. I have been in many operating rooms with doctors but it wasn't until I began shadowing a PA that I felt more of the human side. I had the pleasure of shadowing someone who truly cared about her patients, that went the extra mile to make people feel comfortable, and someone who overall enjoyed their line of work. While shadowing I saw a glimpse of myself and who I aspire to be.

I believe that my experiences have prepared me for this moment and this career. The courses required for my Exercise Science major coincide with the requirements for PA school and the building blocks for PAs. From my degree choice to deciding not to become a PT, to xxxx creating a PA program in xxxx, this is the moment that I have been waiting for. I hope that my compassion is recognized and my determination evident. My ambition to become a PA is the deepest desire I've ever known. No other profession can or will fulfill my need to become a PA. This is where I am belong.
heaven850   
Jul 27, 2011
Graduate / Fracturing my C7 spinous led me to verify my decision to become a Physician Assistant (PA) [8]

"To confirm that the heeling process was proceeding in the right direction," Should be healing not heeling. Also in this sentence "This has given me the opportunity deal with patients in a multitude of circumstances." you should probably reconstruct to say it gave you the opportunity to work with or help instead of just "deal with".

Very good overall!
heaven850   
Jul 27, 2011
Graduate / "Mercy Flight ten minutes out!" - CASPA PA Admissions Letter [7]

I agree with EF_Susan that it seems that after going down certain paths you realized that it's not for you. They may think you will have the same result with PA school. You may want to highlight the actual shadowing you have done that confirms your decision to become a PA. Possibly compare it to the other professions and provide information on how you now know you are in the right profession.
heaven850   
Jul 27, 2011
Undergraduate / "where strong learning foundations" - UCF Why I choose UCF [3]

"Each time those 10 little words pop up into conversation. The child will most likely answer confidently, but what if we were to track one child's answers over a decade. Even if we asked them the question once a month, or twice a year. Their answers would most likely change as they grow older." These sentences don't seem complete, they seem like fragments. Maybe something like: Each time those 10 little words are asked the child will answer confidenlty with the answer changing almost every time.

"and allow me to see them on their quad yearly trips to Orlando." The "quad" yearly wording seems odd you may want to use different wording.

I think you should mention some facts about UCF that also convinced you that this was the right decision. Graduation rate, awards, etc...

Overall it is good and seems genuine.
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