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nanayaws   
Nov 3, 2008
Undergraduate / The elite annual inter colleges soccer competion -extracurriculum. 150 word [2]

i am ask to elaborate on an extracurricular and i chose soccer. please check if the is a grammatical error or wrong words and if it is ok

I bubbled with absolute confidence as i jogged onto the pitch

in honorship of the elite annual inter colleges soccer competion. With anvalanche of questions posed on the mouth of connoisseurs as to who annexes the ultimate diadem, the tension packed in the game bore semblance of a chelsea - mantchester cup final match. i made my debut as all teeming fans sat on tanterhooks to witness any possible magical dreadlock late in the dying embers of the game.

petit by phisique, i was never perturbed as i drew a massive applaud and inspirational set up from my idol footballer lionel messi whos exploits have been commendable by all standards.

just some minutes to end proceedings i got the all important winner to set the stadium agog and send my numerous fans into a mood of frenzy.

from the onset i discovered a great potential in me and proud to say that soccer has given me certain pedigree in life.
nanayaws   
Nov 3, 2008
Essays / How to write essay to describe myself? [22]

'original, confident, articulate...' - essay about words that describe you

original, confident, articulate, broadminded, deligent, passionate, assertive, imaginitive smart, outgoing, tolerant, bold persistent, openminded , gregarious friendly thoughtful, generous, brave , helpful , thoughtful questioning , intuitive, friendly reliable, preserving. faithful, earnest, genuine, lively, intelligent, challenging responsible, fluent, attentive, loyal , fair, adventerous, charismatic, coordinated, audaucious, ambitious, respectful, serious, intellectual, industrous, curious, determined and insightful.
nanayaws   
Nov 8, 2008
Undergraduate / a person who have influenced you and whats that influence [NEW]

please check if there is any grammatical error and if it is catchy thank you

Confidence, intelligence, determination, endurance, is characteristics borne by every
great man. Will smith, Opera Windfrey, Bill Gates, Barack Obama and so many more. The great flights of these individuals were not attained by a sudden flight. An interview with these individuals on how they have made it this far would be an answer like determination, hard work, and endurance running across every statement they make.

Many are these great men who had an influential impart on my life, but from all odds is Barack Obama who stands out outstanding.
I wonder how I used to harbor the thought that physical appearance determines the destiny or your future. This is to say that I used to shy away from responsibilities because of the fact that I would be mocked by my peers. I did not really possess a strong character and was much affected by comments from people. As a result, I more often than not, coil into an invisible shell.

Any time I met my mates in a group discussion, I never contributed for fear of being laughed at if the idea was somehow out of scope or should I say, wrong.

However, events began to change when I heard that half Kenyan, half American man, Barack Obama was president of Harvard law review and also was contesting the American to be the American president. I said to myself, if a half black man could dare to go this far, why should I let the criticism of people from my own race bring me down the ladder?"

Then I remembered a saying by one Myles Munroe that, the greatest tragedy in life, not death, but a life that never realizes his full potentials ". This is because I realized that the higher you climbed the ladder of success, the more you are bound to attract more criticism.

Secondly, I never used to give reference to my adversaries, being a Student council representative for my class during high school. It looks like it was the order of the day in my school, that is not to respect the authorities especially, the student in prefectural position. However, when I realized the way Barack Obama gave way to cutting remarks or indebt criticism from the opposition without any reaction, negatively I resolved to a change for the better, by way of giving reference to those in higher authority than mine without giving cutting remarks. This is because sometimes this remarks lacked substance and only humiliated those in the net of criticism. This changed helped me because I was able to indulge in a cordial and sunny working relationship with my prefects and this accorded me some respect and helped me maintained my position as a student council representative for 3 years of high school .

I may not have had contact with Barack Obama to say he had had any direct influence on me, but I must say that he contesting for American presidency in spite of his African background has had a higher impact on my life more or less.
nanayaws   
Nov 8, 2008
Undergraduate / 'The truth about catholic schools' - why i chose this college (St. Olaf College) [2]

please help me if the essay answers the prompt and if there are any grammatical errors thank you

Thoughts of studying abroad were a big blow to me. I was always scared away by its expensive nature and it racial discrimination. As a result I resolved from studying abroad. However, my meeting St Olaf College a catholic school as changed my perception I had about foreign colleges. It has rather increase my love to study abroad to be able to exploit my hidden talent to the best of my ability.

I didn't choose this school because of the glory of this school or anything of that sort chose this school mainly because of the that u realized this school gives financial assistance or aid to international students like me, who probably cant afford college fees but have an indebt desire to be given a chance to be able to do what they do best in education.

Secondly, I realized that all sects or different cultural backgrounds are given no importance in school. In order words, I chose this college because cultural diversity is not considered in this college. People do what they can do best in a peaceful atmosphere without fear of being racially discriminated this enable anyone realize his or her full potentials.

Thirdly, I realized that most catholic institution are accredited for high discipline and some form of strictness which enables its student to learn hard and also become disciplined. This fact is very true about catholic schools because way back in my home country, I attended a catholic senior high school. In my country catholic schools are noted for discipline and high moral standard which keeps its students in uprightness, for the good of all. That's why I chose this school
nanayaws   
Nov 28, 2008
Undergraduate / The irrevocable statement of John Hersey "success starts with a failure" is locomotion of achievers. [12]

i will like to know if this script is ok and really answers the prompt. please there is anything to make it more catchy feel free to edit it for me thank you

The irrevocable statement of John Hersey "success starts with a failure" is locomotion of achievers. Just as success is not a destination but a journey, even great men of classical history such as Winston Churchill had early failures, probably just like me he did not like mathematics and will go in for an easy to get opportunity.

Lao Tzu's statement that "a journey of thousand miles begin with a step "is very true, if one is able to take the step of failure in learning trip then one is bound to climb the ladder of academic success. Coming to think of myself at age 7 just as I began high school. Everyone was speaking English which was like Greek to me. I could not express myself; the situation was like that of the historic people of the tower of barbell where language originated.

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nanayaws   
Dec 3, 2008
Undergraduate / The irrevocable statement of John Hersey "success starts with a failure" is locomotion of achievers. [12]

Pleas help me with the prompt. Does my essay answers the prompt, and is it catchy.Also help me with sentence structure and grammar thank you.

DISCUSS SOME ISSUE OF PERSONAL, LOCAL, INTERNATIONAL CONCERN AND ITS IMPORTANCE TO YOU.

Marcus Garvey once said "People without the knowledge of their history, origin, and culture are like a tree without root." The history, culture, and origin of my country have had a tremendous impact on my life.

Ghana became the first democratic black African country to obtain independence in 1957. The determination exhibited by the men and women of my country as they struggled to attain independence has inculcated the spirit of endurance, determination, patriotism and perseverance in me.

Just as I began high school, everyone was speaking English, which was like Greek to me. I could not express myself; the situation was like that of the historic people of the tower of barbell where language originated. Not only that, the word "Ma" always scared me, coming to think of the full word Math. The study of math was really a daunting task for me. Algebra and Geometry were like thorns in my flesh. I was laughed at and scorned by most of the teachers and students in my school. My name became the topic of the day and rumors like, "where is he from?" "Why was he even admitted?" was circulating in the school. I received several bits of advices from peers and teachers to quit.

These disparaging statements did not bring me down as I took them in good faith. My situation was like Job in the bible who faced trauma and was asked to curse his God and die. Then I remembered a saying by one Myles Munro that, "The greatest tragedy in life, is not death, but a life that never realizes its potentials." I had to overcome this failure, but how? I then remembered Pierre Cornell's statement the greater the efforts the greater the glory. I then gathered the courage to face my situation squarely without leaving any stone unturned. Then I saw a glowing lamp of solution learn, learn, learn. But how, someone who cannot even bring up a simple sentence not even a common calculation. There and then I felt the spirit of determination, perseverance and endurance inculcated in me by my forefathers running through my veins. I therefore gathered the courage to study and clear all doubts starting from the scratch.

I became one of the best students in the school. I also help them to win a grand prize in a debate competition, and this I am proud of. Summing it up every endeavor has it initial failure, therefore the need for perseverance, endurance and determination which had always been my pillar is the key. John Hersey's statement, "success starts with a failure," is locomotion of achievers. Just as success is not a destination but a journey, even great men of classical history such as Winston Churchill had early failures, and probably just like me, he did not like mathematics and would go in for an easy class to get opportunity. Lao Tzu's statement that "a journey of thousand miles begins with a step" is very true, if one is able to take the step of failure in learning, then one is bound to climb the ladder of academic success.
nanayaws   
Dec 3, 2008
Undergraduate / Creative work of art-Commonapp Personal essay [9]

NH3 i like the script but the problem i have about it is that it is not that personal. you stated something like
I began to look at situations with a whole different perspective. Now when I am confronted by any problem, whether academically or socially, I do not only consider the normal approach but I try to think out of the box. i wish you could have sited an example where you faced a situation and you didn't look at one side but u looked at both sides to solve the situation that i guess will be more personal. the essay looks more of literature or history than personal since you didn't talk much about you.
nanayaws   
Dec 4, 2008
Undergraduate / Elaborate on One of Your ExtraCurricular Activities.150 words "festival" [NEW]

please help me with grammar and choice of words. Also fell free to edit it if you think that will make it better. thank you.

The melodious sound produce by the gongon drum, the fluency and matured skills exhibited by the dance orchestra, the poignant speeches of the various enlighten chiefs and the magnificent crowd of people from different cultural background are signs of a grand festival one cannot afford to miss.

This social gathering has made me more gregarious and eloquent in life. Associating me with my peers from sects or different cultural backgrounds was a daunting task. I used to shy away from them because of the fact that, I will be mocked at. Anytime I met my peers in a group discussion, I never contributed if the idea was somehow out of scope or should I say wrong.

I am now able to associate myself with anyone from different background, tolerate their views even if it is contrary to mine. I was able to achieve this by associating myself with different people and learning much about them in every festival I visit.

I will make use of this developed character in my life. There is the saying that two heads are better than one, therefore being able cope easily with people will help a lot in finding problems to our problems.
nanayaws   
Dec 10, 2008
Essays / points on how to write an essay about myself; give me a sample [12]

i need help on how to write an essay bout myself, background, family, etc and how i will bring the diverse culture of my country to the school. please if you can give me a sample to read to enable me write mine.

thank you
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