AMiNENGiNE
Nov 12, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The word physics summons two scenes' - Why MIT essay [6]
Hi.
I read your essay, and i think this is excellent, plus it have a lot of good points.
However, I personality believe that your writing have a few short sentences such as " The essay is not really concluded, as you can tell." that it can reduce your essay, so you should use strong and long sentences.
On the other hand, your structures are simple, and they are mostly COORDINATING structures such as " This is a weird rough mix, but I think it's shaping up. ".
Therefore, if you need high score, you should use more complex structures -SUBORDINATING structures -
Hi.
I read your essay, and i think this is excellent, plus it have a lot of good points.
However, I personality believe that your writing have a few short sentences such as " The essay is not really concluded, as you can tell." that it can reduce your essay, so you should use strong and long sentences.
On the other hand, your structures are simple, and they are mostly COORDINATING structures such as " This is a weird rough mix, but I think it's shaping up. ".
Therefore, if you need high score, you should use more complex structures -SUBORDINATING structures -