BrandyFlorida
Nov 15, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'I first met shir'- help in Describing a person .. [3]
Hi, I do see errors. Here is how I would probably type it up. Of course it depends on exactly what you are trying to say so I may not have interpreted exactly what you meant. Classic novels are very helpful in explaining exactly how things are expressed in English. Have a good afternoon.
I first met Shir when I started at my new school. She has brown eyes and a smile that makes me smile! She is a friendly girl that will never let you down, is always understanding and will listen to your problems. Shir is the kind of person that loves to help other people. I believe that if there were more people like Shir in this world then the world would be a better place.
Hi, I do see errors. Here is how I would probably type it up. Of course it depends on exactly what you are trying to say so I may not have interpreted exactly what you meant. Classic novels are very helpful in explaining exactly how things are expressed in English. Have a good afternoon.
I first met Shir when I started at my new school. She has brown eyes and a smile that makes me smile! She is a friendly girl that will never let you down, is always understanding and will listen to your problems. Shir is the kind of person that loves to help other people. I believe that if there were more people like Shir in this world then the world would be a better place.