Undergraduate / 'Art has no normality' - UC Prompt #2 [12]

I agree with others in that its well written grammatically and structurally. However, from my perspective I don't get what is unique about you other than I would say your are a very good writer. I get less of your accomplishments artistically and more of a sense that you are very creative in your writing. Either way it says a lot about you and shows you're are talented! Great job.

Undergraduate / 'My family moved to USA' - UC prompt 1 [14]

I would recommend providing examples of what specifically interest you in engineering and economics. Something you have seen or preferably done to tie it back to your desire to get involved in these disciplines as part of your dream. Is it a natural gift for something or a realization you had that brought you to recognized your interest in engineering and economics. If you are looking to reduce your word count I would recommend taking things out like your teachers name or redundant comments about how your family feels about your recognizing what you wanted to do. Good Luck!