Undergraduate / 'Facebook - What kind of person had I turned into?' - Common App Personal [6]

this is a great idea, and almost everyone experiences this, so how does it affect you personally. Maybe you can write how you have changed by writing this app and reflecting back on yourself. By writing this essay I have recently come to realize ... or something maybe. Or maybe like even after all this I still enjoy these technology that brings you together with your the community and interact with your friends. these are just my suggestions..

Graduate / My dream is to be a researcher! ; Masters in Civil Engineering [4]

I have passion to know how things are happen and these are the subjects which explain it very well.

**things happen

As I was first guy in my class in my undergraduate

**the first guy

As I noticed that almost all problems related to math, I made a decision to do somethin

**decided

It was the presentation that permanently made me thought that I have
**think

Over all good essays, some word choice that you might want to fix.