scarpino
Dec 31, 2008
Undergraduate / 'the gift of singing' - U of M Setback Essay Punctuation help [9]
Minutes passed for what seemed like hours (awkward)
The piercing glances of the judge's
Don't start sentences with BUT
In discovering MY gift of singing at a very young age
I began singing at home, at church, and in local, state, and national singing competitions in an effort to develop this new found talent. (makes it less awkward)
sprit (I think you mean spirit)
way too many commas (I have the same problem)
I'm really not qualified to offer any advice, but I hope this helps!
Good job
Minutes passed for what seemed like hours (awkward)
The piercing glances of the judge's
Don't start sentences with BUT
In discovering MY gift of singing at a very young age
I began singing at home, at church, and in local, state, and national singing competitions in an effort to develop this new found talent. (makes it less awkward)
sprit (I think you mean spirit)
way too many commas (I have the same problem)
I'm really not qualified to offer any advice, but I hope this helps!
Good job