Undergraduate / 'foreigners love to remark on Chinese education system' - Common app [10]

When heard that there would be a sea of monotonous tests in our formidable last year at high school, dread and pressure occupied my mind just like everybody had.

When I heard that there would be a sea of monotonous tests in our (dont need formidable) last year (at high school), dread and pressure occupied my mind just like everybody had (illogical comparison here).

lots of grammar mistakes actually, you might want to have it checked

Undergraduate / 'Iqbal's story' - Spanish native speaker but I am applying for a US college [10]

topic seems abit broad, wavering focus, but good detail