Undergraduate / 'living & dreaming' - University of Chicago Essay [4]

Hi, I just finished writing U. Chicago essay. It's due tonight! can someone please help me?

***Especially, I need some suggestion for my conclusion! it's quite weak. I don't really have a great idea how to explain my thought.

THank you very much! (please regard I'm an internaitonal student)

Topic: There is third thing between living and dreaming. Guess it.

my answer is basically "be yourself and keep pursue your dream no matter what others say"

"Mommy, when I grow up, I will be a great magician!" a five year-old boy enthusiastically claimed to his mom after he watched a breathtaking magic show on television. Time passed; the boy moved through school, however, his dream, becoming a musician, stayed like sparkling jewels. Soon it was time for him to jump into the real world of college. "Brian, have you started to look for colleges yet? It is already end of your junior year. You had better start some research. Say, how about Johns Hopkins University? They have a great pre-med program," his mom said.

"Mom, I do not want to be a doctor; I want to be a magician who can give hope and smile to people," he said.

"Ha-ha! Do you still want to be one of those kids admiring a magician whom you saw when you were five years old? Stop kidding. If you don't want to be a doctor, just tell me that you don't want to be a doctor, instead of surprising me with those ridiculous answers," the mom said.

"Mom, I am not kidding. I am being serious. My dream has always been magician ever since I watched the magic show," he said with little bit of discouragement.

All of sudden his mom's face was hardened. "Are you crazy?! You want to be a magician. Please stop making fun of me. With your perfect GPA and SAT score, you can go Ivy League schools and become a renowned doctor! Do you even know how much magician makes? You will not even able to feed your family. You had better grow up! You are not a naïve five-year old child anymore!"

The boy's youthful dream was soon broken into pieces in front of this cold reality. He followed societal expectations and attended Johns Hopkins. He became a successful doctor as his parents wanted. He earned millions of dollars and was recognized as one of the best doctors in the nation. However, nothing could fulfill his empty heart. One day, he had a little boy as a patient. His childish grin reminded his unattained dream, so he asked him a question, "What do you want to be when you grow up?" "I want to be a magician! I saw a magic show last week, and he was AMAZING! I want to be like him," the little boy said. "A magician? That's a great dream, but how about something like President of the United States someone that everyone admires?", he suggested. "Umm... I do not care what other people think. For me, being a magician is a super-star!"

///The little boy's answer brought him back to his childhood memory. He quickly realized the difference between children, living in a dream world, and adults, facing reality, is the consciousness of circumstances. As people grow up, they learn how to consider the practical aspects but then their dreams are often buried. The reality of societal expectations and values replace those dreams. The boundary between living and dreaming is a thin piece of paper. People who chase their dreams regardless of the surrounding will continually bring them closer to their reality. Therefore, be yourself! Continually drive into your dream! As the linkage station between living and dreaming, being yourself will bring your dream one-step closer to reality.

Scholarship / "Who wants to pray?" - Case Western Schoarship Essay [NEW]

Topic: Describe your potential to be a leader. How do you envision yourself making a difference in the world.

(the parenthesis means looking for better word choices)

"Who wants to pray?" teacher asked during the Theology class. The room suddenly became quite. We waited about five minutes but still nobody volunteered. "Okay, I will go," I finally volunteered. Since our school is a Catholic school, we always pray beginning of the class. I volunteered last month, last week, and even yesterday. However, no one, but me, seems like willing to break the ice and step up. On the other hand, surprisingly, once I start the first prayer, the numbers of students volunteer. Only thing they need was the piece of paper to ignite the fire - a leader.

Any paper can ignite the fire. However, some paper ignite the fire which can last a couple hours during the cold winter time; some papers like straws make fire that can only last a couple minutes. Therefore, in order to last (sustain, maintain, keep) people's motivation until they reach the goal, the good leadership is essential. After holing numerous leadership positions, from the class president to the editor of the school yearbook, I could have attained some great leadership qualities. The first thing I realized is "Leadership is not equal to dictatorship." I often see leaders who completely ignore their teammates' opinions. It is true that compromising everyone's opinion is hard. Nevertheless, directing members without consideration will merely bring complain and rebel. Second, the great leader is quick at finding each member's strength. Discovering strength means acquiring another step toward to the matchless team. Third, be exemplary. People are often scared of taking responsibility or making mistake. That is why people do not stand up for something they believe, unless there is a leader. Therefore, the leader should be the person who starts the fire.

Making difference in the world is not too difficult than it appears to be. You just may start a chain reaction. Therefore, as a leader, I will be the catalyst to start the Chain Reaction, making a difference in the world.

Thank you so much guys! :)

Scholarship / Lesson from Nature - scholarship [2]

Topic: "THousands of tired, nerve-shaken, over-civilized people are beginning to find out that going to the mountains is going home; that wilderness is a necessity; and that moutain parks and reservations are useful not only as funtains of timber and irrigating rivers, but as fountains of life!" - John Muir, naturalist and preservatonist

In our tired, nerve-shaken, over-civilized existence, how can we look to the natural world for ansers to larder issues facing society?

----It's due tonight! I'm really freaking out, since I'm international student. I really need proof-reading from American friends, but it's little too late. It's already mid-night. Please help me guys! I will really apprecciate it! :)

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"What can I say about Mama? She was a great working ant who not only contributed to the community but also did her best to raise us. About a week ago, a bulldozer invaded my house. She tried to make sure me and my siblings were out, but she just couldn't escape on time..." Brian said final good-bye to his mom with full of tears.

"I am sorry for your lost. She was a great ant," Tom, an old ant, who lives across the street from Brian, said after the funeral service.

"Tom, I just do not understand humans. Why do they have to destroy us in order to acquire what they want? Why can't we have a symbiotic relationship with human as if we have with aphids? I... I just don't understand..." Brian said reproachfully.

"Brian, we have tried... several times... it just never turned out great. Human always want to dominate things. You will easily find it out by looking back their history. From small fights to the World War, humans have constantly fought to acquire control over other creatures, but guess what the result is. The average temperature of earth is increasing by two Celsius every year, glaciers in the North Pole is melting, and fish with two tales were born. Humans do not know how to live their lives. Nature was existed long times before human were even created. They were born under the nature. Those foolish humans better come with the realization that if they are not willing to harmonize with nature, they will be rather eaten by nature someday," Tom said with the seriousness in his face.

"Tom, I think someday is tonight. They have been constantly plundered us, from our shelter to food. It's time to show our power!" Brian firmly proclaimed.

"You are right. Maybe it is the time. I will contact to other insects. Humans shall learn a lesson tonight!" Tom said.

That night, ants, spiders, cockroaches, moths, and all the other insects attacked the humans who recently swept Brian's house away and built their shelter. Under the insects' concerted operation, human's gigantic body and power were meaningless. Insects' great cooperation led to victory, and the peace in the insect world continued forever.