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Feb 13, 2012
Scholarship / "Me, my career and my goals" essay - International Scholarship [4]
I was born in the capital city of Austria, Vienna, to a wonderful family of 9 people:M my parents andwith us, seven children. We have hopefully not only many problems but also a lot of fun. My father works as a director of a Non Goverment Organization ( NGO) and my mother as a nurse, while we, children, study universities, secondary schools, or elementary Schools .
During my first years in the Elementary Schoolwith extended language teaching I got excited about English. I liked the way our teacher provided us songs, and games in English,.bB ut mainly I remember how my father took serious concern about supervising how we understoodunderstand this language., thatThe point that he did not really care about any other classes made me work hard. I needed to live a decade more to understand how important was his approach was . My excitement about helping people and nursing leadled me to choose attend Secondary Church School for Nurses. After four years I gladly finished it with a diploma.
There is one important reality I did not mention yet. I love Abalone. My father thinks that Abalone is a great game that gives you the basic ideas about world and that is why he taughthisour whole family how to play it. I started to play when I was about five years old and I still do. Even though my father never meant any of us to play Abalone on such a high level, we were improving a lot and currently we are one of the best players in our country. In 2008 I was the European Champion in 2008 and a year before a Vice- World Champion in 2007 . Beside Abalone I love sport. I like tennis, ping-pong, ice-hockey and I used to play basketball for about ten years . Our team won a few medals, however these achievements cannot be so seriouslyascompared to the ones in Abalone.
During my free time, I like volunteering. I help the Charity of Prague their collections and projects. In 2009I and my friends and I decided to work as volunteers during FIS no abbreviation World Championship that was held in our country. We enjoyed helping with these events and we were amazed by the cultural differences.
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Hi there,
I am running out of time so I could only correct some of the spelling and grammar mistake. In my view, it is more important that you should restructure your essay to describe your career path, goals and hobbies, that are relevant to the objectives of the scholarship. Your essay should answer the questions:
1. who are you? what is your career goal your ambitions?
2. to what extend the scholarship will attribute you to achieve your career goal and ambitions?
3. Why should they give you the scholarship?
4. What will you can create the impact if you receive the scholarship/
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I don't know exactly what the scholarship for, but something like those questions should be address. you should not write on what you are not clear about.
Hope it helps
I was born in the capital city of Austria, Vienna, to a wonderful family of 9 people:
During my first years in the Elementary School
There is one important reality I did not mention yet. I love Abalone. My father thinks that Abalone is a great game that gives you the basic ideas about world and that is why he taught
During my free time, I like volunteering. I help the Charity of Prague their collections and projects. In 2009
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Hi there,
I am running out of time so I could only correct some of the spelling and grammar mistake. In my view, it is more important that you should restructure your essay to describe your career path, goals and hobbies, that are relevant to the objectives of the scholarship. Your essay should answer the questions:
1. who are you? what is your career goal your ambitions?
2. to what extend the scholarship will attribute you to achieve your career goal and ambitions?
3. Why should they give you the scholarship?
4. What will you can create the impact if you receive the scholarship/
...
I don't know exactly what the scholarship for, but something like those questions should be address. you should not write on what you are not clear about.
Hope it helps