Writing Feedback / TOEFL - technology make our work more convenient and faster than before, we can save so many time [NEW]

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Nowadays, as the society's rapidly changing there is a controversy between people on the topic of life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents was child. some people though is right, while others disagree with it, in my opinion i agree with the former one for following reasons.

To begin with, as we know that science technology make our work more convinient and faster than before, that we could save so many time to take rest and enjoy our comfortable life.

for example, when our grandparents was child there was no telephone, if they want to talk or communicate with other people it will spend so many time to send a letter, and now we use telephone could touch the people really fast. also, today if we want to go to some place is very convinient for us by train or plane, this is hard to image when our parents was child.

Not only the materials could fullfill people's need, but also there are so many different entertainment equipments that help people to relax and improve their spirit need. for example, today people could chose to watch TV at home, we can surf the net, even play computer game with other people, also we could chat through the net. all of this, could make you relaxed and comfortable, however our grandparents were never heard it when they were young.

Finally, we have to admitted that there also bring some problems that make our life seems like more hard than before. like the air pollution make us seldem see the clear sky in some area; like too many cars make the transportation get worse, make people latter for their work. however, the sky always the clear and blue, do not warried about the traffic jam when our grandparents was young. i think this will be improved as the secience technology's developing.

To sum up, even there some problems brings by the socioty's developing, it made people's life even the world take a great advantage in the history. therefore we can say today people's life become easier and more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were young.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL--- 'learning facts were more important than the ideas' [3]

Nowadays, there is a controrary on the topic of which is more imprtant for students, ideas and concepts or facts. in my point of view, facts were more important than the previous for following reasons.

To begin with, as we know ideas and concepts were make out based on the facts, people get the ideas through learning from the facts. for example, Newton know theThe law of Universal Gravitation was learn from the fact that apple fall on the floor, if he did not notice this face, how could he make this law. also why the galieo tells people the different weight ball will fall on the floor at the same time from the same high, that was because he take the test and he learns from the fact.

What's more, only through learn the facts we could easy to know and understand the ideas and concepts. for example, most of people may have this experience that when we learn a new concept, if we know the fact of this concept from we could easy to catch the important of the concept then learn what that means. also if you were a chimical teach, you want he student to under stant a equation, when you show their he connection between different materials, it will be easy to understand for them.

Take the above, not means we could miss ideas and concepts, they also paly an very important part of our understanding. when we were child how could we know and understand the facts, we have to understand ideas and concepts learn by heart. only when we grow old enough we could understand the fact. therefore when we study understand ideas wil help us to know the facts.

To sum up, however understand ideas and concepts paly an important part for students study, however, learn facts were more important than the ideas and concept, it help us to understand the things real aspects and easier for us to learn it.