Undergraduate / writing an essay on a topic of my choice for uni application [5]

I like the essay and the idea behind it but I think you could show even more good qualities about yourself and I feel like some parts of it could flow better.

Faq, Help / Is it safe to post my essay here? Or should I be worried about Plagiarism? [175]

While I'm definitely not an authority on this subject, I'm pretty sure that the fact that it is dated, and has your name attached is enough to prove that the ideas are yours if you run into rouble.