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noori1234   
Dec 17, 2008
Undergraduate / I really need help starting my UT Austin essay [9]

I have to write 2 essays. The First one has to be the statement of purpose, and the other has to be a essay about an issue important to me.

1) The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application.

I do not know where to start...please help.
Also the essay about an issue important to me, i want to write about the dowry system in the Indian culture, since i am a Indian..and i know how it affects the people out there. I am just having a hard time starting it out.
noori1234   
Jan 15, 2009
Undergraduate / I really need help starting my UT Austin essay [9]

UT AUSTIN transfer student essay.

PROMPT: Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

ESSAY: Some people believe in love at first sight, while other people believe that it takes time to love someone. It is hard to form a relationship with someone whom you do not even know. In order to build a strong bond between two people it takes time, patience, and trust. If that relationship goes well then it ends in a marriage. However, there are still some cultures out there that do not allow their children to meet that special someone on their own. Growing up in America, I never thought that this would happen to me. I never thought that my parents would not even allow me the chance to find someone on my own. The idea of having an arranged marriage did not even come to mind, because I knew that an arranged marriage meant that it would be an agreement between two families rather than the couple getting married. It was only my senior year of high school, and my mother started to complain how I was not even engaged yet. Even though we had been living in America for so long, my parents still had that narrow minded mentality of getting girls married at an early age. My mother would repeat the same thing over and over again, about how I will never find a decent husband if I get too old. I ignored everything my mother said, and inside I knew that I would find someone whom I loved. However, I was wrong. As days went by, my parents started to get more serious about me getting married. My mother tried all her best to find someone for me who lived in America, but when my mother would send my picture out to the opposite side, I would either get rejected because of my short stature or my dark skin color. Even with matchmakers involved, nothing was getting accomplished. I was not hurt by all this because I was not ready to get engaged to someone who was willing to get married to me without even knowing me from the inside. Summer was here, and my family had decided to visit our family in Pakistan. I thought to myself that my vacation to Pakistan would get me away from this marriage chaos for a little while. When we went to Pakistan, I met girls who were my age that were either married or engaged. When I would ask them if they had a love marriage, they would all laugh at me. Every day I woke up with a fear inside that my parents would try to find a guy for me here. Before I knew it, I was getting proposals. One day I got a proposal that was from a very nice wealthy family in Pakistan. My parents did not even bother to come ask me if I wanted to get engaged to that guy. I was only allowed to meet him for one hour and that was it. Every time I wanted to speak up and say no, I thought about my parent's reputation and happiness, and then I just squeezed my tears back. Before I knew it I was engaged to a guy that I did not even know. I understand the fact that love can evolve in an arranged marriage, but I believe that everyone should have at least one chance to find someone that they have fallen in love with. Having an arranged marriage is an issue for a lot of girls and guys who live in America. Parents need to understand that being raised in America, children have a whole different mentality. Marriage is not a social arrangement. Marriage is not a business deal. Marriage is the union of two old souls who have finally found each other after an eternity, and this is hard to become possible in an arranged marriage.

PLEASE HELP!! i was thinking if i could get some better vocabulary in here! and is this long enough?
noori1234   
Jan 15, 2009
Undergraduate / Issue of Importance (Marriage). UT austin [2]

Many cultures have settled in the western world and being part of two cultures can be difficult at times. I have been raised in America, but come from an Indian family. This can be very difficult when our modern western lifestyle clashes with our parents hopes and wishes. One very important example of such a clash is the concept of an arranged marriage. Some people believe in love at first sight, while other people believe that it takes time to love someone. It is hard to form a relationship with someone whom you do not even know. In order to build a strong bond between two people it takes time, patience, and trust. If that relationship goes well then it ends in a marriage. However, there are still some cultures out there that do not allow their children to meet that special someone on their own. The idea of an arranged marriage is usually an agreement between two families rather than the couple getting married. Denying an arranged marriage is usually a sign of disrespect toward the family. The true definition of marriage is when there is no checklist of requirements outside of human emotions. The only prerequisite is love. Although I was raised in America all my life, I was grown up with the fact that I will one day have an arranged marriage.

Right when I graduated from high school, my mother started to find matchmakers from the Indian community involved to find a right guy for me. Every time a family came to see me or every time my parents sent pictures of me to the opposite side, I was rejected. I felt like I was being put on display and waiting for someone to buy me. Every time we would get the same response, "she is too short, and she has very dark skin color." Having an arranged marriage meant that the relationship starts with looks and not trust, love or friendship. I always thought to myself, how can I live with a person who only knows me from the outside. Although nowadays arrange marriages allow the guy and girl to see each other and talk for couple of hours or maybe even meet a couple of times before they get married. But the question is, is meeting a couple of times enough in order to decide if you can spend your whole life with that person? I can understand that arrange marriages are a part of my culture, but I too understand there we should be at least provided with one chance to find someone whom we want to spend our lives with. I do not have a problem with an arrange marriage, because I know that my parents do what is best for me, but every girl has a dream.

Marriage is not a social arrangement.

Marriage is not a business deal. Marriage is the union of two old souls who have finally found each other after an eternity, and this is hard to become possible in an arranged marriage. "There is only one happiness in life, to love, and be loved," George Land.
noori1234   
Jan 17, 2009
Essays / "Confessions of a Student" [25]

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