armcast
May 17, 2012
Writing Feedback / my first motorcycle ride [4]
"me,dad and uncle headed to a nearby ground but it was filled with guys playing cricket,all three of us dint want those eyes on me.so we headed ahead and saw a calm gravel road ahead."
That can be fixed grammatically by doing this:
My dad, uncle and I headed to a nearby ground, but it was filled with guys playing cricket. Neither of us wanted their eyes on me, so we moved on and saw a calm gravel road ahead.
Also, I wasn't sure what you meant by "ground."
"me,dad and uncle headed to a nearby ground but it was filled with guys playing cricket,all three of us dint want those eyes on me.so we headed ahead and saw a calm gravel road ahead."
That can be fixed grammatically by doing this:
My dad, uncle and I headed to a nearby ground, but it was filled with guys playing cricket. Neither of us wanted their eyes on me, so we moved on and saw a calm gravel road ahead.
Also, I wasn't sure what you meant by "ground."