janetyang
May 24, 2012
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: (more productive, energetic) EASIER FOOD PREPARATION IMPROVED PEOPLE'S LIVES [5]
In my opinion, I think there is no problem when you are using your own experience. I mean as long as it is logical, which I think it is in your writing. Also, I think a lot students face your situations, hence, it is not totally subjective. :D However, this is just my own thinking, I am also a student, preparing to take a TOEFL test. Therefore, my thinking may not accurate.
Moreover, I have some comments about your essay:
"... I think this is a good introducing passage, which is clear, fluent, and not complicated.
In my opinion, I think there is no problem when you are using your own experience. I mean as long as it is logical, which I think it is in your writing. Also, I think a lot students face your situations, hence, it is not totally subjective. :D However, this is just my own thinking, I am also a student, preparing to take a TOEFL test. Therefore, my thinking may not accurate.
Moreover, I have some comments about your essay:
"... I think this is a good introducing passage, which is clear, fluent, and not complicated.