Writing Feedback / movies and television positive and negative effects; 'distracts young people' [3]

do you agree or disagree with the following statement? movies and television have more megative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

In the past 50 years, movies and television have become a large part of people's entertainment activities. The influences from movies and television, therefore, have grown exponentially on young people's behavior. There is a continuous debate on what roles movies and television play on young people. From my point of view, I believe that movies and television have harmful effect on young people than a favorable effect.

To begin with, television distracts young people who need to concentrate on their school work. Nowadays, there are so many of cable channels that lure young children and take their attentions from their studying. Because young children are lack of self control and deciding when to stop, if they start watching television, it is hard to stop and make them staying away from it and focus on what they are supposed to do. Even if their parents force them to turn off the television and studying, their mind and attention are with the show that they are addicted to it. Of course, they would not get a good grade on their test and quiz, and have a hard time to focus in the class. They may have a day dream and do not listen to what teacher says because only thing they think is what will happen next on the show. It is like a man who is addicted to drinking and someone enforces him to quit the drinking, this person will never stop thinking himself drinking an alcohol. Also he will not be able to focus any of his work task, and just looking for a way to drink an alcohol. Therefore, watching television has bad effect on young children who need to focus on studying.

Secondly, television makes young people violent, due to the easily accessible to the violent scene by watching television. Violent scene does not only contain aggressive behaviors but also include some inappropriate things like sexual images and showing smoke cigarettes. When they are not protected from those scenes, they easily believe and tend to act like what television shows because they are not mature enough to see what true reality is. These kinds of images can make them believe that as something interesting and fun. Children and teenagers are in a stage of life where they want to be admired by their peers. Therefore, they probably want to experience what they have seen, and become a popular kid among the others. Nowadays, it is not too hard to find news about teenager rapes a girl or have a sexual relationship. Because of exposing sexual image and scene many times, they think that having a physical relationship is no longer dig deal in their life. But they also do not know how important being responsible of what they are doing is. This eventually leads increasing percents of pregnant teenagers and experiencing abortion too. Also, smoking tobacco is the same thing happening these days. Teenagers believe that smoking is some kind of cool to do. Even if they realize what they have done later, and try to quit smoking, they already addict to nicotine. So television can provide young people a wrong idea and make them believe what they are doing is fine to do.

To sum up, I understand there are many of advantages of watching television and movies. People are able to release stress by watching movies and television has educational programs for young people. But you cannot deny that young people should have more time to play with others outside so that they can have interactions with them, and it is much better to read a book to gain knowledge. So I strongly believe that television and movies have negative effect on young people.

Writing Feedback / toefl essay: friends for fun or for giving help [2]

There is nothing better than surrounded by good friends. You may look at some people and their friends with envy as they chat away happily and participate in activities together. It may be hard to figure out which friends are better when considering the friends who can have fun with and the friends that can get help from. From my perspective, the people who are willing to help me in the crisis time are much more cherished than who just want to stay with me to have fun.

First, it is easy to find abundant sources that make you entertaining and fun around you, but it is hard to find a true friend who can give you a hand when you are in need. What do you do when you are bored? You probably turn on the computer and play games or surf internet. Also, you can go outside play some sport. You do not need to have friend just for fun because there are many other activities to entertain you. However, what can you do, when you are in need of something that you cannot do it without some help from others? That is when you need a friend who can give you help when you need it. But when you need help, you need someone to help you. Like, in a school, you are absent one day, and teacher is going to discuss important materials for next test in class. No one really can help you to get that information even parents cannot do this for you. On the other hand, your good friend in your class can help you to have the information. He or she help you to understand the material and give you a note to copy. This shows that it is more important to select a friend who can help you when I need it whereas there are a number of source which can replace a pal whom you can have fun with.

Also, the friends who can be with you when you face straitened circumstances are true friends. There is a famous proverb that "a friend is need is a friend indeed." This sentence indicates that real friend will appear in the proper time, but the friend who just stays with you when you are in the top of life and leave you as quick as possible when you drop off the mountain is not a good friend. Friends for fun can be stay with you the short period of time and you may share good memories together, but are they really going to stay with you when you two will have bad memories? When you are happy and everything is going well, you do not see what is real relationship is because people will treat you better than ever. But when you are in bad situation and asking for help, they, who are not true friend of yours, will leave you because you are no longer benefit to them. But the real friends stay beside you whether good or not, and they never turn their back on you. For example, Helen Keller was a kid; she was frustrated for her blindness and deafness every day. However, her teacher came into her life, and things begun to change. Although, it was very hard for her teacher to teach Helen Keller to learn language, she went through all these difficulties because she truly loved her with all her heart. Finally, Helen Keller succeeded at last. If her teacher left her because of difficulties, Helen would never able to overcome her disability and learn language. Going through hardship together makes two friends bond stronger because they share same thing each other.

To sum up, it is good to have fun with friends. But it will be much better when you have fun with people who you love and you believe that they will not leave you no matter what. You can learn more knowledge and improve your life through the friends' help.