Writing Feedback / GRE: Students should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively [2]

hi ,i think if you use the second paragraph as the introduction it would be better but its not wrong of course.and in the first paragraph you could use the word to grow or to internalize instead of incubate because its for birds generally.by the way you have done a great job.

Writing Feedback / 'Reach Malaysia!' - essay check [2]

Hi,first of all your essay is not clear i could not understand what it was about,internet?,facebook?using of handphones? what?,then it doesn't have a good structure and you have some mistakes in sentences like in the fourth line second sentence the correct form is"not only in the u.s.a its widely used but also all over the world.

Writing Feedback / Around 40% of people are studying because of their interest in subject and to gain qualification [4]

Hi,in addition you should also write a conclusion paragraph at the end even a short one.