Writing Feedback / "Traditional Market"- Narration for a theme : Look before you leap [2]

Hi everyone!
I am trying to write a paragraph to support the theme.
Please help me with some suggestions like do the sentences link well each other? do i need to improve (Grammar, topic sentence,etc)something? (no more than 250 words)

Thank you! And if you need someone check your essay you can inform me as well!!
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Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. For a long time, Traditional market which locates in
the central of the town is always the first choice for our Saturday routine. It is because Saturday is the most prosperous that almost all vendors

from different areas will gather at among other weekdays. However, something happened last Saturday when we paid a visit to the market. The
market was still full of noisy sounds. The vendors shouted loudly to attract customers. Stinky smell of fish mixed with the fragrance of newly-picked
flowers. The blood stain of the animals was the normal scene when people stopped by the meat booths. Suddenly, we noticed that a strange stand

which we never saw it before at the end of the road. There were many pieces of colorful cloths hanging around with a wooden board painted two words

"Magic Cloths". We stood in front of the stand and surprisingly enough, the vendor amazed us by turning those cloths into vests or scarves without sewing.

With the vendor's expressive language, my mother and I decided to buy ten pieces of cloths undoubtedly. When we unwrapped them at home and tried as

the same as the vendor did, what we found out was merely a fraud. They are no more just pieces of cloth with beautiful patterns. We lost one thousand

because of the carelessness. Until now, those "Magic Cloths" hanging in my room keep reminding us of this mistake without thinking twice.

Undergraduate / 'My Pink Partner' Narration and Description for My auto pencil [4]

Any advice is welcomed and appreciated. Grammar, sentence structure, coherence,etc.

My Pink Partner
Pentel Caplet 5.0 made from Japan could have been the most popular types of auto pencils when I was in junior high school. Its simple and well-shaped body won many students' hearts at that time because students didn't have to use pencil sharper any more. In the beginning of the semester, parents would take their children to a stationery store to buy the necessity for school. The first thing came into students mind was Caplet 5.0 and I was no exception. I chose the pink one like chose a magic wand in the novel Harry Potter.

The auto pencil is now outdated and dirty like a piece of old furniture. The lid covered the entire body looks like the misty glass. Even so, the body is hard as the reed stick. On the top of the shaft of auto pen labels three stickers. One of them is with my Chinese and Japanese name written on it. Name sticker was one of the famous stuffs during junior high school days. I used to have one thousand my name stickers at that time. The second sticker is similar to the third one. They are the mantras in Tibetan painted crookedly in red. The memory about how I got the mantras has faded away and I only remember they represent the meaning of "protect and support". Inside the shaft of auto pencil is lead which has circled the interior body dirty marks.

Though my pink partner is nearly antiquated to write with, it is still my best friend accompanying me to go through those tough study years. I think I will keep using this this auto pencil until it is no longer be used.

Undergraduate / Narration for a theme : Look before you leap (Revision) [NEW]

Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. For a long time, traditional market which is located in the central of the town is always the first choice for our Saturday routine. It is because the traditional market on Saturday is the most bustling that almost all vendors from different areas will gather at among other weekdays. However, something happened when we last paid a visit to the market. The market was full of noisy sounds as usual. The vendors shouted loudly to attract customers. Stinky smell of fish mixed with the fragrance of newly-picked flowers was suffocating and unendurable. The blood stain of the animals was the normal scene when people stopped by the meat booths. Walking through the crowded path, suddenly we noticed a strange stand which we had never seen before. Along with the stall stood a wooden board with the words "Magic Cloths" painted on it. There were many pieces of colorful cloths with exquisite embroidery or Hakka print hanging around the stand. Touching the folded smooth cloths, we were looking forward to seeing how the seller sold his product. Surprisingly enough, the vendor amazed us by turning those cloths into vests and scarves without sewing. With the vendor's expressive language, my mother and I undoubtedly bought ten pieces of cloths. When we unwrapped them at home and tried as the same as the vendor did, we found out it was merely a fraud. They were no more than just pieces of cloths with beautiful patterns. We lost one thousand dollars because of our carelessness. Until now, those "Magic Cloths" hanging in my room keep reminding me of this silly mistake without thinking twice.

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Again, I need some suggestions about my grammar or wordiness.
The professor told the class to add physical description elements but since I had written some physical description.
It is difficult for me to come up with more ideas. QWQ
I do need help!!