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Posts by leahdaoud
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leahdaoud   
Nov 9, 2012
Undergraduate / "I love Jar Jar Binks and Lebanese Food" - Stanford's Roommate Essay [6]

I'm really worried that this is way too casual ... but ... I'm not sure. Anyway, any help is greatly appreciated!

Prompt: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Hi, roomie!

In light of the fact that we'll be spending a considerable amount of time together, I think it's best if you get to know me a bit first. So here goes nothing. I like the Hallmark Channel and I am not ashamed of it. Cheesy movies make me happy. I've always wanted to use the word "floccinaucinihilipilification" in a sentence. Sadly, I have not yet had the opportunity. Nothing gets me into a rage like dirty socks and social injustice -- and not necessarily in that order. Family means everything to me. If you bring red velvet cupcakes into our room, I will eat them. I am a private person but, with enough prodding, I can be enticed out of my shell. I love Jar Jar Binks and Lebanese food. On the rare occasions that I get upset, I always express my frustration in fluent Arabic. I am a conservative Christian and I support LGBT rights. Freddy Krueger from the Nightmare on Elm Street terrifies me. I think Cary Grant is the most attractive man to ever walk this planet. I am addicted to Doctor Who. David Tennant is the greatest thing to happen to the 21st century. I am passionate about libertarianism. I love cats. I chew gum religiously. I give excellent hugs.

If, after reading all this, you're still willing to be my roommate, then you're either the kindest or the craziest person in the world ... and, just for the record, I'm hoping it's both.
leahdaoud   
Nov 10, 2012
Undergraduate / 'An evening with friends' - Williams Looking through the car window [4]

I hate to be a grammar Nazi, but I'm almost positive that song titles usually include quotation marks. :-) Other than that, aside from agreeing with cezyou's comments, I think this is a pretty stellar essay. Your personal details (Adele, 1990 Chevrolet, etc) make it sound really sincere and fun.
leahdaoud   
Nov 19, 2012
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1- "Superheroes" [2]

While I LOVE this essay, I'm just not sure it fully responds to the prompt. Maybe you could write more about how ballet has shaped you personally? How has it stretched you? Could you expand on how it raised your confidence? Something like that, anyway. :-)

That being said, I love your writing style. It's personal and friendly and makes me want to get to know you better. Good luck with the admissions process!
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