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tcapistrano1020   
Nov 20, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Engineers can craft and create' - UC essay "your world" prompt [6]

I'm kinda confused about your topic. I think you need to clarify it a little bit. I also feel like you need to transition smoothly from one idea on to another. You have a lot of solid ideas, which is good, but I feel like some of it is not closely related. I don't really get how global awareness lead to engineering. I feel like the conflict in Iraq and other countries has nothing to do with you wanting to be an engineer. I don't know, this is just my opinion.
tcapistrano1020   
Nov 22, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Section A students' - UC Prompt 2 personal statement [3]

Academia De Pulilan is a school that will always have a place in my heart. I attended this school when I was in fifth grade. This is the school that helped me become an achiever. The schools in the Philippines is very different from the schools here in the United States. Students wore uniforms, we had a flag ceremony every day, and each grade level were divided into two different categories: Section A and Section B. The Section A students were the smart ones while the Section B students were the average ones. When I entered this school, I was placed in the Section B class. It was disappointing at first but then I realized that I have a lot of opportunities to excel in this class. Only a handful of people in my class cared about earning high grades. The lack of competition, gave me an advantage to work my way up. Before I entered this school, there was a boy in my class that was always the Top 1 which means he earned the highest grades every quarter in the Section B class, but then when I entered their class, I replaced his position. Every quarter, our homeroom teacher would write the names of the top 10 students in the board and I would always be the first one on the list. I was proud because I proved to myself that I am not just an average student. I became inspired to achieve more things so I started to get involved in my school's extracurricular activities. I joined a cooking contest with my friends, I recited a poem in front of a big crowd of people, I joined an essay contest for our school, and I became part of the Girl Scouts. At the end of the school year, we had a Recognition event. Usually, only the Section A students was invited to the event, so I was really glad when I was invited. I didn't know what kind of award I would receive since the faculty members kept it a surprise. I wasn't really expecting much, I knew that the students on the Section A class were really smart so it would be tough to beat them. I came to the awards ceremony with my grandparents because my parents were working abroad and they couldn't be there. I patiently waited for my name to be called. After several minutes of pure anticipation, my name was finally called. I was the recipient of the 2nd honorable mention award! I wasn't expecting to rank 2nd out of everyone in my grade, I realized that I beat some of the Section A students that ranked lower than me. After receiving that award, I felt the feeling that nothing is impossible, and that feeling stuck to me ever since then. My ambitious personality fueled my desire for greater things. Even though I only attended this school for a year, I'm happy to have accomplished many things. I learned to always hold my head up high and strive for the things that I want to achieve, because the rewards are evident when hard work is given.
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