Undergraduate / EXPRESSIONS; NYU Supp - What intrigues you? [10]

Your essay is very descriptive and I think you educate the reader about how significant a certain method of communication. I was intrigued by what you were intrigued by! I think it's really good. I would really appreciate if you read my common app essay Patching Things Up thanks :)

Letters / "I am excited about the opportunity"; Cover letter for postdoctoral application [2]

From the papers you have published....etc. that sentence needs to be changed. Maybe you could talk about how something specific in the papers intrigued you and you could learn a lot from whoever but don't say that you're impressed by their academic achievement. That sounds a little condescending although I'm sure you don't mean it that way. Through my education background... needs to be changed describe a little about why you're passionate about math and what drove you to learn fast and thoroughly not deeply, creative-thinker should just be creative thinker (no dash) but other than that it's pretty good. Also I would really appreciate it if you could edit my common app essay. Any help would be wonderful thanks :)

Undergraduate / Programs/Korea&Lima; Brown University;Distinctive feature& Where lived? [3]

I think your essays are flawless and fantastic. I'm applying to Brown too and I thoroughly think you're exactly what they want. Good job and good luck!!!! I would be wonderful if you could help me edit my common app essay. Thanks :)

Undergraduate / "Determination"; Stanford Supp_ what matters to you and why ? [2]

I think forehead is supposed to be forward lol. Doing so is of such relevance is awkward maybe you could say so much that doing so

has become a necessary...etc. I think this so-desired position should be that so-desired position. I don't think the for instance is necessary and think you should just lead into your example without it. At the end nothing is grated should be nothing is granted. I see what matters to you but I don't really see the why. Your example shows your determination but why are you determined to face your goals? Did someone influential teach you that? Did a certain experience make you gain determination from then on? If so, I think you should include that and cut a little out of your French exam example. I hope I helped you a little :) It would be great if you could edit my common app essay too thanks :)