"I am excited about the opportunity"; Cover letter for postdoctoral application

Hi all,

I am applying for postdoctoral position.Here is my cover letter. I would appreciate if somebody could help on anything.

Thanks a lot.

Dear Committee Members:

I am writing in response to your advertisement in ???. I am excited about the opportunity to apply for a faculty position in ???. I wish to apply for the position of ???. I am currently a graduate student at ??? University under the supervision of ???, and will be graduating with a Ph. D. in June 2013.

From the papers you have published, I have been deeply impressed by your academic achievement. I believe that a training opportunity in your team would help me greatly.

I am a self-motivated, creative-thinker capable of independent thought and research and also a good collaborator with excellent communication and writing skills. I am confident that I fit the profile of the position you offered. I assure that my enthusiasm and ability could be a great asset in your research group.

I have a strong passion for mathematics. Through my education background and my own exercise, I learn new things in mathematics and softwares very fast and deeply.

My PhD dissertation was focused on pointwise estimates of stabilized finite elements. Those results have been published in peer reviewed journals. One paper was publiseded by Numer. Methods Partial Differential Equations. Another paper was published in Applied Numerical Mathematics. Recently, I was granted ??? Fellowship (about 1% acceptance rate). Before my PhD, I have been a undergraduate student instructor for five years. At this stage, I were subject to wide acclaim and awarded ???.

During my research career, I am skillful in the techniques of numerical analysis and partial differential equations. Also I have expertise in Fortran, Matlab and Latex etc.

Attached please find my CV with the statement of my research interest. The attachment is in Acrobat PDF format, so if you have any problem in opening it, please let me know. I am more than willing to answer any of your questions concerning my application and research. I appreciate your time and look forward to your response.

Sincerely yours,
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From the papers you have published....etc. that sentence needs to be changed. Maybe you could talk about how something specific in the papers intrigued you and you could learn a lot from whoever but don't say that you're impressed by their academic achievement. That sounds a little condescending although I'm sure you don't mean it that way. Through my education background... needs to be changed describe a little about why you're passionate about math and what drove you to learn fast and thoroughly not deeply, creative-thinker should just be creative thinker (no dash) but other than that it's pretty good. Also I would really appreciate it if you could edit my common app essay. Any help would be wonderful thanks :)