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rainneil   
Dec 30, 2012
Undergraduate / One name became the center of my world - Haruki Murakami; Hamilton Sup [2]

In the year before I came to the States, my obsession with reading books, which had been extinguished for unknown reasons ever since I entered junior high, revived. One name became the center of my world-Haruki Murakami, almost all of whose works I later read. Although often cast into the margins of society, the protagonists of his fictions faithfully stake their identity on a spirit of rebellion and pursuit of freedom. From them, having long suffered isolation from my peers and lack of acknowledgement, I gained consolation and even assurance. "Be autonomous," I told myself. "Don't worry about success or productivity; just be truthful to your soul." Incontrovertibly believing in the idea, I even used it as a criterion to judge people. In my opinion then, a person without individual autonomy was nothing but a walking zombie, numb and worthless.

Everything changed as I diversified my reading after I came to the States. I found a despaired salesman who commits suicide to gain insurance payments for his children, a black housewife who buries all her dreams and desires out of her loyalty for her husband, a strong-willed woman who devotes a hundred years of her life simply to the prosperity of her family... Surprisingly, I found that I couldn't despise them, which I would have done before, for the poverty of their individual autonomy. Instead, I found them unimaginably brave. I didn't know why, not until my Psychology teacher introduced me the model of PERMA (Seligman)--Positive emotions, Engagement, Relationship, Meaning, Achievement. I had overvalued the importance of engagement. Although those things altogether make a good life, people have their own penchants. Some autonomous people, like me, care mostly about the engagement of their lives; others care for something else-like relationships, achievement and contributions to the world. It's presumptuous of me to have despised people who held beliefs that were different from mine.

I believe that the diversity of my personal readings and the classes I have taken have opened the once narrow-minded me. Although I have decided to pursue a career as a writer, my interest in natural sciences has faded. Recently, as I was reading some introductory writings about John Rawls, Immanuel Kant, and John Stuart Mill, I was totally stunned by their illuminating ideas. Since Hamilton doesn't have distribution requirements, I can enjoy the freedom to further delve into my interests, old and new, instead of simply focusing on my major. Maybe some time later, when I look back, I will once again find out how constrained I am now.

There's a specific program that I find quite appealing-ACC Summer Field Studies Program. Ever since I climbed the Mount Gongga three years ago with my dad, I have planned to spend the year after my college graduation supporting education in Tibet. It's not only because I was struck by the herdsman's daughter's narration about how insufficient the educational resources there were, but also because I have always wanted to spend one of my best years simply with nature. I know that there must be a long way between a student and a teacher; this program can offer me some opportunities to practice becoming a teacher.

Last but not least, as I'm obsessed with outdoor sports, running and biking, college's situation and environment matter a lot to me. Surrounded by endless greens, Hamilton offers numerous wonderful trails. Besides that, as a result of its northern location, the temperature in Hamilton is always cool, which is the best for running and biking.
rainneil   
Dec 31, 2012
Writing Feedback / Do you prefer working at home or at office? Office; TOEFL [5]

As a person who has taken toefl before, I will say that if you could write like this during the exam, you would no doubt score no less than 28.

Your biggest problem is your grammar and word choice; both take time to get over. But don't worry too much, those graders know English isn't your first language, so some flaws are tolerable.

For your fourth paragraph, your con point doesn't seem relevant to your pro. You can change a little bit.
rainneil   
Dec 31, 2012
Undergraduate / I have always enjoyed running alone; Common App/Extracurricular statement [2]

This has been revised yet. I desperately need some suggestions.

I have always enjoyed running alone, as the quietness refreshes me and brings me the peaceful mind. But being a member of Varsity Track Team showed me some other facets of the beauty of running. The first one was about the idea of communal cohesion. Together we practiced, rested and competed; we shared happiness, sadness, success and failure. There is a picture engraved deep in my mind. It was just after the last event of the sectional meet, John still lying exhausted on the field, Peter and Erik walked to the side and beckoned me, "Come on, Neil, we will wait for the result as a team." When the final result came out that we were the winner, we embraced each other, screamed, and ran a victory lap. It's a kind of ecstasy I had never experienced before, and I knew it's not for the championship. The second was about passion. urged by the frequent races, I could no longer deem running simply as a recreation, but pushed myself unprecedentedly hard. Through the whole season, I shortened my 800m time for about 20sec. This passion has stayed with me even after the season, and on January first in Albany, I am running my first half marathon.
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