Essays / Role playing can instigate some of the aggression ; Aggression and Video Games [2]

although nicely written please add some survey results and improve last line

Undergraduate / Sudden inspiration; MIT/ What attributte of your personality are you most proud of? [3]

nice essay but i could not understand this part
As a child, I used it to imagine my own worlds of medieval battles that worked like epic playgrounds and to invent my own Tolkien-based stories to satisfy my creative spirit and approve my Spanish class in the process.

Undergraduate / MIT EECS provides tools and resources; MIT admission short essay/ Department [6]

Quite strong points are there maybe you could also help me since i am applying to MIT i want to know what should i write in the above essay topic

Undergraduate / 'Dad, Life, and its Offerings of Value Experiences' -COMMON APP-PERSON OF INFLUENCE [5]

TOUCHING ESSAY but delete this line
When I walk across the stage in June

Undergraduate / MIT EECS provides tools and resources; MIT admission short essay/ Department [6]

thanks for your advise

Undergraduate / Dual Enrollment; Emory // Unique qualities [3]

Does Emory also have any link with georgia tech?
if not then a review is needed in 1 paragraph
although the essay is nicely written

Undergraduate / Working in surgical units as a volunteer; Common App Essay- Experience [4]

Very personal and touching essay just add more details that what u also experienced that day

Undergraduate / Working in surgical units as a volunteer; Common App Essay- Experience [4]

i meant people describe more about what else u saw that day about the people affected