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OhBeExGmoney   
Dec 31, 2012
Undergraduate / Our experiences define ourselves; Mercersburg Essay/ Myself at Mercersburg [7]

I am applying to a private school in PA. I have to write and essay with no word limit on "How do I hope to define myself at Mercersburg, and how will my presence in their student body help to define their school?" I am having trouble writing about this topic! I dont know how to set up my essay after the introdution and what to mention in the following paragraphs.

Heres what I have so far:

Mercersburg Essay

Prompt: "How do you hope to define yourself at Mercersburg, and how will your presence in our student body help to define our school?"

After thinking about this prompt for awhile I have come to believe that we do not define ourselves, but the experiences we have and the way we handle them define us. We define ourselves with words that do not exist; the words out of one's mouth cannot explain how they will react in a situation. For example you can say you are a good person but it takes good deeds that you've done to define yourself as a good person. As I dwell on this thought, I pounder on what other think of this topic. Mercersburg is an experience of a live time that would define even the most imperfect people for the better. I believe the experiences that I can have at Mercersburg would be an amazing opportunity. My mom talks about the experiences she had at Mercersburg and I believe that is how she found what she was meant to do and why she was put on this earth. I believe that those are to major components to defining yourself.

What should I include after this and what should I write about??

Please help its due by Jan. 15, 2013
OhBeExGmoney   
Dec 31, 2012
Undergraduate / Special needs student ; STANFORD - WHAT MATTERS TO YOU AND WHY? [16]

I like the beginning! Great Hook! But I understand about not knowing how to weed in "why?" I believe you should dwell on why this is the MOST important (or what matters the most to you) topic to you then you may be able to expand on the "why?" part
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