Undergraduate / Networking / Pacific National Exhibition; Why U Toronto?/Extracurricular activities? [3]

What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree and why would you like to study at the University of Toronto?
What skills have you developed through your extra-curricular experiences that will support your future success as both a student and an engineer?

I grew up in a world of fast growing science and technology, which had sparked my interest in engineering early on in my life. Engineering is the foundations of the luxurious privileges that we enjoy today, but many do not realize the complexity of this field of profession. Yet, I am prepared to undertake the difficult problems and tasks that accompanies it.

Growing up I have always been influenced to not only see the "what" but understand the "why" behind things that I encounter in life. My father is a civil engineer and he always encourages me to initiate investigates to not only appreciate the exterior of the objects, as well as understand how it is able to function the way it does. At the same time, as a highschool student I have always been fascinated with the different sciences, though I often find myself wondering how do some of the concepts that I have encountered apply to real life. After having to familiarized myself with engineering, I realized that it gives me an opportunity to not only continue my interest in physics, but also allows me to use my knowledge and utilize it in everyday life. As I reach the senior level of science in highschool, I began tutoring other students in chemistry and basic sciences. During the sessions, I helped my fellow peers to understand the core concepts of every problem. It is through these experiences, I have learned to not only understand the ideas but to communicate it with others, developing patience and solid team work skills. In addition, I volunteered at community centers for sports and holiday camps, because I believe in giving back to the community as I have been so privileged to grow and learn in such a blissful environment, meanwhile I also enjoy helping others with skills that I posses. Last summer, I worked for Pacific National Exhibition, I was intrigued by the physics and the mechanic behind every rollercoaster and amusement ride, not only I had the opportunity to communicate with the engineers who designed some of the rides, also I was treated to review the blueprints for the rides and the physics behind each coaster. At the same time, I worked as a games attendant in the amusement park, I learned to communicate with others, while utilizing the sales training that I have received in the "field". Throughout my experience during my summer, I had a better understanding of the field of engineering as well as the skills for articulating my thoughts to others.

I believe enrolling in the University of Toronto would offer me the opportunity to meet and connect with variety of people, and surrounding myself with hard working and intelligent peers will motivate myself to become a better me. In addition, U of T offers the Professional Experience Year, which allows me to participate in the actual field, while traveling around the world to experience the different cultures and aspect of engineering. Studying in this university would grant me everything I need to exceed my goals for my future.

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Writing Feedback / ESCAPE FROM STRESSFUL LIVES; Descriptive Essay: Tiki Beach [3]

To escape the stressful lives that we all live today, my family and I decided to take a vacation to the Cayman Islands. The stunning view left me speechless, while the experience of jet skiing on the clear blue water sent shots of adrenalin through my veins, which left me savoring every moment on the island.

Looking out from the balcony of a small but exquisite restaurant, I gazed at the pale blue sky. Watched as the fluffy marshmallow clouds glided lazily across the sapphire sky. Below the pristine vault of heaven layed the splendid ocean. The sunlight lit up the clear turquoise water, as the rays of light penetrated the fragile surface of the sea. I walked down the newly painted stairs, but was soon startled - not by the heat radiating from the pearl white sand, rather than the texture. The fine grinds of crystal formed a soft cushion, with each step I sank further into the frosted mattress. As I walked towards the vintage lounge chair, the sun rays attacked my bare skin. Meanwhile, the tingling burning sensation heated my body. Finally, I reached for the bamboo chair, while the trickles of sweat rolled down my cheek. It was quiet on the beach, besides the gently and soft sound of the waves, as the ocean came and went.

There were only a few people on the beach. A couple sat beneath the beach ball colored sun umbrella. The young man layed on his back avoiding any meaningless movements, as he stayed still, wish the waves of heat would die down. On the other hand, the brunette woman prepared herself for a long tanning sessions, as she carefully applied the white paste sunscreen to every inch of her body. In the far distance, two young children played gingerly in the water, as if they were too afraid to interrupt the mesmerizing scenery before them. The little boy held his sweetheart's hand and led her towards a new adventure, exploring the magnificent yet mysterious sea that layed before their eyes. Looking through my sunglasses, an odd pair caught my eyes. An elderly man in a Hawaiian shirt swiftly climbed a brown haired horse. With a quick snap with his wrist, he expertly controlled the horse as it jogged along the water.

The sun reached its highest point as noon stepped in, I hopped of the lounge chair and headed over to one the colorful jet skis parked near a small wooden shack on the water. Eagerly, I turned on the vehicle and the powerful engine roared on the quiet beach. As I slowly twisted the gas handle bar, the ski took off instantaneously, almost threw me off in the process. As the machine gains speed, the clement wind rushed towards me, as well the cool water splashed from all around the jet ski refreshed my warm body. Meanwhile, shots of adrenalin pumped into my veins pushing to go faster. the danger of falling thrilled me, as giggles escaped my closed lips. Suddenly, the scorching heat radiated from the sun was no longer present, nothing was present, but the sensations and what was ahead of me were the only things mattered. As I became more familiar with my new found joy, the more fearless I became. I leaped up with each wave I hit, using the momentum to reach higher with each jump. With every turn I faced, I shifted my weight to push for shaper turns. Time sliped by quickly, as I roamed the ocean surface, soon the fuel level became low, forcing me to drive back.

I sat as the dark orange sun started to set, while the sky and the entire ocean became red. I watched as I searched for words, paradise. As days went on, the vacation chased all my stress away leaving me completely rejuvenated. The picture of the beach sun set will forever be burned into my memory.

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