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mascot92   
Mar 1, 2013
Undergraduate / My life is defined by three sections of time; UTexas - SOP [3]

I am posting my essay to submit for transfer to the University of Texas, Austin and I would greatly appreciate any critiques on my essay. Writing is not my strong suit so anything can be changed.

My life is defined by three sections of time. The first being a relatively normal and happy childhood, the second period flooded my world with a wave of destruction when I was ten years-old, and the third is my life as of high school. These times for better or worse changed nearly every factor of whom I am. However, one thing that has remained unchanged throughout all three distinct moments in life is my dream to one day attend the University of Texas.

Reminiscing on my early childhood is an easy feat. I grew up with two loving parents and two surrogate grandparents who lived next door. They were directly responsible for creating my passion with the University of Texas. Which started as organically as a Saturday night game and shouting hook 'em horns. Through time, it emerged as a fact I would attend the University of Texas. Even though my dream was to be an actress and comedian like the great Lucille Ball. Like all things, this dream would come to pass as would this chapter in my life.

November 9, 2002 the day my grandfather had a stroke, was diagnosed with brain cancer giving him two months to live, or as I call it my tenth birthday while a horrible day, it was a mere catalyst to the darkest period in my life. Because within the year, my grandfather would of course pass away, my father would have an affair and leave to parts unknown without contact for almost three years, causing my mother to have a nervous breakdown. It was a long five years that eventually left me living alone for nearly a year while my mother was still struggling. These traumatic events took much away from me. However, over time, I have found what I acquired through these experiences to be invaluable because I gained responsibility, determination, forgiveness, and most importantly perseverance all of which played heavily into my goal of making a better future for myself.

Quite like my tenth birthday, the day my grandmother was laid to rest marked a new beginning for me. It allowed me to leave the place I had called home for fourteen years without feeling guilt for leaving the one perpetual figure in my life. So with my commitment to my grandmother free I reconciled with my father and moved to his home in Florida. Florida was never my real home, but a sanctuary where I could begin to heal. After two years creating a new life and focusing on academics and myself, I came to the realization that in order for my parents to afford my attendance at the University of Texas, I would have back home to Austin. Unfortunately, my efforts to the University of Texas were met with rejection. I was crossroads; I could attend another four-year college and abandoned my ultimate ambition or attend a community college with the hope to transfer. I chose the latter challenging my determination and perseverance for the first time in years.

Now I hope to usher in a new era, starting with my acceptance to the University of Texas. It is there where I want to work towards finishing my degree. Although I am still undecided on my major, I am confident with the abundant number of courses offered I will be able to direction that is well suited to my interests. Not only will the University of Texas provide the environment that I have always longed for with friends, a higher standard of education, innovation, and even a water skiing club to pick up on a childhood hobby of mine. It is my belief that all of these components available at the University I will take what I have learned through school and many life experiences to making my parents, grandparents, the University, and ultimately, myself proud.
mascot92   
Mar 1, 2013
Undergraduate / Everyone needs a moment of clarification; UT- SOP [4]

I enjoyed your story but have a few grammatical corrections.

Throughout our lives we get opportunities to make a difference, a change to either ourselves, or the life of someone around us. Everyday we seek for that opportunity which lays in front of us yet we are too blind to see it and pray for a spark to set the fire inside us to be the change that we want to see; an epiphany.

I made paper trading accounts on several trading platforms. I learned and absorbed a vast amount of information.

He worked as an analyst at a nearby firm, but he also did day trading on the side to make a bit of safety cash as he called it. I decided that I would pursue finance as a major because while I had little results in my attempts online, I loved the experience. I know people that are twice my age who are too scared to invest in the stock market, but I as a twenty-year-old was happy with the environment.

My first job was a sales representative at Sprint. I assumed it was going to be simple just sell phones to customers, but that was the furthest thing from the truth.

and be careful with overusing words. I am no expert but hope this helps!
mascot92   
Mar 1, 2013
Undergraduate / FUTURE OF CHINA'S ECONOMY; TRANSFER [7]

I was frustrated when none of the professors were able to help me further elaborate my Foxconn research in a labor economics aspect.

Apart from the lack of courses that fit my academic interest, Albright's rigid curriculum also prevented me from a liberal art education that I aspired one, which contains both breadth and depth in study. In Albright College, I did not limit my course choices to economics and math.

I was also disappointed when my registration on biology class was canceled due to the lack of laboratories.

I understand Albright is a small college; however, I was still frustrated by the lack of course choices.

Believing a field study would benefit my research, I had no choice but to pay for the trip myself. In addition, I gained access to only small amount of data.

Despite Albright's curriculum did not fit me well; I still enjoyed the unified campus. The college offered great support in student activities and allowed me to start a new club. However, I was dissatisfied with the study atmosphere. I remember a complete silence during a group discussion, and a group remember by myself.
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