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wordsnyworld

Apr 6, 2013

Essays / essay on water; (emotional paragraph) [3]

hey... i have to write on the following topic
' write on any one of the elements of nature you identify with"
it is not supposed top be a factual paragraph but more of an emotional paragraph talking about the qualities of them.
i started writing on water, this is what i have written till now please help me continue-
Water. it can be a calm, peacefully flowing river at one place while a raging storm at another. It can conquer the thirst of a small boy while it can also destroy the lives of many others in the form of a flood. It can be a companion to thousands of people listening to their stories of agony,pain,joy or distress....

this is what i have written till now please help me continue...
thanks,
much love <3,
VANI

wordsnyworld

Apr 6, 2013

Writing Feedback / "Only once one has known real sadness can one feel true happiness" [3]

parthasarathy17
NUMBER 1

" This quite explains the fact that only true experience with sadness can lead you to feel the originality in the happiness. "
That part can be written as "only when one experiences true sadness can he feel happiness in its true meaning"
it is only a suggestion because i feel this gives your paragraph more intensity.

NUMBER 2

There are many examples which further prove my point. I would like to bring in the quote "failure is a stepping stone to success".

instead of saying 'i would like to bring in the quote' you can say, 'For example,the quotation,"failure is a stepping stone to success".

Again, just a suggestion.
all in alll, the paragraph is great and gets your point across to the reader...

MUCH LOVE <3,
VANI :)