Writing Feedback / Is Hong Kong a great place? [NEW]

Information Essay - Is Hong Kong a great place?

A long time ago, there is a small fishing village on China's south coast, after the baptism of wars and colonial, the small fishing village has already became a super modern city , the city is called Hong Kong， a great city with complex history, polybasic city culture and advanced economy. I have been Hong Kong 1 years ago, it's the greatest city I 've ever seen.

Hong Kong is a city which was incorporated into China for the first time in dynasty Qin by the First Emperor of Qin. During long times, "Following the triumph of the 1st Opium War, Hong Kong became a colony of the British Empire with the primary objective of maximizing interests of British merchants"(Zhou), until 1997, Chinese government exercises sovereignty over Hong Kong, and establish Hong Kong Special Administrative Region. Although Hong Kong belong to China now, it's still maintain its capitalist system and enjoy high degree of autonomy including all matters except defense and foreign.

Due to Hong Kong have a beautiful city cityscape, convenient public traffic, polybasic culture and advanced economy; It's not only a great place to work in but also a good place to have fun.

The first reason why I think Hong Kong is a great place is that its geographic location. Hong Kong is Located on China's south coast, enclosed by the Pearl River Delta, due to the specific position, Hong Kong became an important harbor of Asia, the major harbor of Hong Kong called victoria harbor, has already became an important harbor of the world, making Hong Kong amongst the world's busiest, and an average of 220,000 ships visit the harbor each year, including both ocean going vessels and river vessels, for both goods and passengers(Wikipedia ). It makes Hong Kong become a worlds' trade center, lots of product was imported or exported from here, consequently stimulate Hong Kong's economic development. Thanks to the perfect geographic location, Hong Kong became a developed modern city, and also attracts lots of investor all over the world.

The most surprised thing of Hong Kong is it's temperature was not so hot as I 've imaged, although it's located in south coast of China, if let me describe Hong Kong's temperature by one word, I would use "warm" of "comfortable", but certainly not "hot". This is the other reason why I like Hong Kong. When I got off from the airplane which landing in Hong Kong, I felt so comfortable: the air is neither so wet nor so dry, the temperature was neither so hot nor so cold, it's just a hospitable climate for human beings. Although Hong Kong is located near southeast of China, it's not hot as other south-city, the climate is so suitable for human beings, so I believe you would easy to fall in love with Hong Kong when you get off from airplane.

If you are looking for an fascinating place to have fun, I would strongly recommend Hong Kong , because there are lots of attractions, super shopping mall, parks and play field in here. For example, Victoria harbor, is not only a harbor， but also the most significant attraction of Hong Kong, "it's also one of Hong Kong's greatest assets, people come from all over the world to view and admire it. The best places to view the Harbor is at the Peak Tower on the Victoria Peak, or from the piazza at the Culture Centre or the promenade of Tsim Sha Tsui which on the Kowloon side"(Wikipedia). Rides on the Star Ferry to view the harbor are also popular. Victoria harbor has also played host to many major public shows, including the annual fireworks displays on the Lunar New Year. There also have other places to have fun, such as Repulse Bay, Disney land (the smallest Disney land around the world), Hong Kong Park, Jumbo Kingdom, Hollywood Road, Cat Street, and Madame Tussauds. In addition, there are lots of ancient temples throughout the territory, such as Man Mo Temple, and Wenwu Temple (one of the most ancient Chinese temple), these temples could give you a journey of history and culture. So, Hong Kong is really a perfect place to have fun.

It's a pretty good place to study, because Hong Kong's culture was a hybrid culture of east and west. For example, Both English and Chinese are all its official languages, both Cantonese and English are Its spoken languages; there's lot of traditional Chinese festival here, like Dragon Boat Festival, Tsing Ming festivals, and Spring Festival is the most important celebration in Hong Kong. Hong Kong's culture can be described as a foundation that began with Mainland China, then it became much influenced by British colonialism. Hong Kong is like a melting pot of culture, which combine with Western and Original Chinese cultures perfectly, and developed its unique polybasic city culture. You can enjoy different kind of culture here，

The most fascinating part of Hong Kong is it's economy.

works cited

The colonial history of Hong Kong . N.p., n.d. Web. May 10, 2013
Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia. Victoria Harbour . N.p., n.d. Web. May 10, 2013

weakness aspect
1. The thesis of each paragraph can be longer, and be more clear.
2. Is this research paper more likely a introduction? Maybe I need to do more research about it
3. There are some grammar mistakes.
4. Is The topic a little broad? If I just focusing on one aspect of Hong Kong, might it works better?

Writing Feedback / "Made in China"; Fake products produced in China [3]

This essay is about 4-5 pages rough draft
but I have 3 questions for this essay.
1. is the organization of this essay need to be improved?I think the organization is a weak of this essay
2. does the solutions are reasonable? I think some of them are just in an idea condition
3. I think I need talk more about the anti-intellectual property thief, do I?

If you have looked at the cases of many products, you wouldn't be unfamiliar with the words "made in China". More than 80% of products are made in China. These products are cheaper, more beautiful and delicate than those made elsewhere because of China's technology, its productivity, and its economy are in a stage of high pace development. In addition, China has an advantage in population that other countries do not have, which creates a cheaper labor force. Consequently, more and more investors decide to establish their produce factories in China in order to reduce their production expense. However, not every made-in-China-product is genuine. There are lots of Chinese companies that are producing fake or imitational products and then inject them into the Chinese market. Consequently, fake products play an important role in the Chinese market. It's a pretty big problem because the fake products reduce the original companies' profit, decrease designer's passion, and produce so much inconvenience. It is clear that the fake product-problem has to be solved in the future.

The existence of fake products is the 2nd largest problem of Chinese market economy. It would reduce some original companies' profit and increase transaction expense of consumer. Because the market of a product might be seized by its similar but fake products, the company need to spend great sums of money to attack the fake products company. The purchaser also needs to spend lots of money to avoid fake products when a transaction occurs. In addition, fake product decrease designer or innovators' passion, because nobody would like to see their fruits' of labor deprived by others. It's not right when they have done the hardest work but the income was earned by others. Finally, more and more Chinese designers prefer to create products for other countries' companies, because they would earn so much more income by doing this. On the other hand, these fake products cause lots of inconvenience, because they are easy to damaged, once a product was damaged unexpected, it always take some troubles to its users.

However, the fake-product-problem is not incorrigible; there are still some solutions available to solve these problems.
The government might play an important role to restrain fake-products flowing in the market. The government could support part of companies' innovation-project, for example, bear part of a companies' design expense in order to support the design of a product they make on their own instead of copy other existing products. These funds might come from either good or fake companies. Most manufacturers have limited capital, to reduce their produce expense, so they always copy other exist products. Even some manufacturer copies other companies' brand in order to save the expensive creating expense. Nevertheless, if some innovation expense was covered by the government, companies' expense is reduced, and designers' wage would be increased, consequently designers' or innovators' passion are aroused and companies are able to create their own products and get some patents. Consequently they could gain much more profit. Finally, not only "made in China" would be replaced by "designed by China", but also the number of fake-products are reduced.

On the other hand, the government could also increase punishment of counterfeiters and provide awards or incentives to whistleblowers in order to increase citizens' awareness of copyright. For example, once counterfeiter is found, they have to pay large fines to the government. This money has to exceed the total value of their fake-products three times, and then this money should be used to support some other legitimate companies. In addition to this, the government should reward whistleblowers money. This money also should come from part of the fine from the illegitimate company they impeached. In addition, government should also forbid people to purchase fake-products. When someone is found to have bought fake-products, he or she should have to pay the same amount of money as its quality good to the government. Then government should use this money to support some legitimate companies. So, once this strategy is carried, not only the counterfeiters are punished, but also some of legitimate companies should Receive financial assistance.

The most drastic method to solve the fake-product problem is to increase copyright awareness education. Some colleges or high schools should add some elective classes related to copyright awareness, to increase people's copyright awareness when they are students. The more awareness of copyright there is, the higher wages of designers there will be, which means more people with talent are willing to do design work while less designers would change their major or go abroad to find another job. Once a company finds people with good abilities of design, they have the ability to create their own products, and earn more profit.

All in all, Copyright awareness is pretty important because the major reason why lots of companies copy other companies design work is that people don't fully understand copyrights or patents. Design works are so easy to copy in China. Because the design work is easy to copy, some fake-designers always copy other designer's work. Some talented, excellent designers have always done the real creativity work but earn the same extremely low income as the fake-designer. Most people are not willing to do the creativity work although some of them would be excellent real designers. Consequently, Chinese design works is Stagnant. If awareness of copyright and patent is not increased, the fake-products-problem wouldn't be solved from the root. That's why I think increase copyright awareness is pretty important.

China's productivity is in a stage of high pace development and China has a population advantage that attracts more and more investors to establish their produce factories in China in order to reduce their production expense. China has more opportunity to produce product, and gain some profit. However, this only depends on the manufactured product; the gross profit we earned is limited. We need to have our own products, own patent, and exterminate fake products by increasing counterfeit punishment, forbid people to buy fake-products, carry out a series of foster strategies, and increase copyright awareness education . I wish every "made in China" could be changed to "Designed by China" in the future.