Writing Feedback / TOEFL:How should people spend money? Personal Enjoyment or Fulfilling Duties? [3]

Topic:
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment--doing things they like to do--rather than doing things they should do.
Answer:
Most people always have an inclination to run away from the burden of life.Moreover,they spend time on their own personal enjoyment rather than doing duties that they should do.I believe some reasons that retreat them to do so.First,in fact they do not like the professional career in which they belong.Secondly,they rely more on social networking sites and slowly they might get addicted to it.

Most people in today's life who are working in corporate companies in fact affected with hectic work they are dealing with and so they actually don't like their work.This lead to them to rely on their personal enjoyment and become more lethargic in their work.Some people find difficult to cope with the environment in which they are working.Some of them find difficult to adjust with coworkers.So they try to hideout from real facts by doing things which they actually always like to do.

Secondly.people spend more time on social networking sites like Facebook, Twitter etc.They actually wasting their valuable time by sitting idle in it.In fact posts by our friends make us feel worse about our own lives. This is due to the fact that we naturally compare ourselves to our peers. If the people around us are posting happy, significant life accomplishments (which happens every day, if you have a lot of friends), then we feel worse about our lack of having anything good to report and finally get depressed.

Finally,new technologies in mobile and electronic field always amuse people and they intend to buy it.This lead to wasting their time on it by playing games and chatting with friends.Most of the people now have smart phone and they carry it wherever they go and use it for browsing their favorite websites.

To wrap it up, in my point of view, pressure of civilized world and accessibility of entertainments, also personal tendency lead to people spend much time to entertainment in compare with the past.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY:-People learn things better from those at their own level [5]

Topic:
People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.

Answer:
In common, people always like to work in a group with similar ages or having similar thoughts. Since each individual can think and response in a similar way as others in the cluster. So it is easy for them to exchange ideas and ask doubts without any hesitation. I indeed agree with the given statement because of few reasons: people with similar thoughts and ideas, no apprehension and hesitation to ask doubt, easy accessibility.

First and foremost, people with similar ages can understand the problem of each other very easily. A professor or teacher may not get the exact doubt of a student what he really thought about it. Because there is a chance for the teacher to think in a higher level than what the student think. But at the same time, a student having similar thoughts can easily understand the doubt of an another student. In my own experience, during my college days, most of my doubts were cleared by my colleagues. Since they could get what I really felt about one thing.

Secondly, we don't have an apprehension or hesitation to ask our doubt or learn new things from our colleagues. Sometimes we might have hesitation to ask our doubt to an authority because we think it is a stupid doubt. We might have an anxiety that what they really think about me. For example, people are not willing to ask a doubt like 'how a baby is made' to a teacher or a supervisor. But we always feel comfortable when dealing with our friends.

Thirdly, we can learn better from our colleagues those whom we enjoy being around. Because, when these people try to teach us something, it will be in relaxed, friendly atmosphere with no pressure.If we are relaxed, then we can learn better.

Additionally, our colleagues can be accessible at any time. Normally, we spend most of our time with our friends or colleagues. So we can learn new things from them at any time. For example, if we have a doubt in our lesson at a midnight before the day of university exam, we can easily clear our doubt by calling our friends without any fear.

To sum up, I think it is comfortable and easier for a person to learn new things from an individual who think in a similar way as him. The above reasons and arguments in fact justify the given statement.