Writing Feedback / Which is more important to you?A Business Or A House [6]

You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which
would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
First of all,you have to determine which one of these will be more important to you in the furure.
I think the business will become more important to me in the future.
Because as many people know that if you have a large income,
the rest will come later as long as you're not bankrupt,
I mean if you purchase a business , you get the oppurtunity to make more money easily as long as you're smart enough not to be bankrupt.

When you purchase a business,later on that you can expand your business that may make you more popular in your sector,
but if you chose to purchase a house ,
you don't have a chance like that.
So to make it clear(to sum up) i'd rather purchase a business than purchase a house due to the following facts that i mentioned at the beginning of my writing.

Writing Feedback / When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. [2]

When students move to a new school, they sometimes face
problems. How can schools help these students with their problems?
Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
-Well,Actually I'd suffered it for long enough,when i first went to high school.nobody could know what it was like to study away from home untill they experienced it.The very first thing schools need to do is how to provide students with more sport activities to clear their minds.They should not be bothered with too much homework.They need to help student with specific(personal) things.The point is,they must do their best to make them feel at home instead of making mad business(doing dirty work).They have to refrain from (or avoid) using violence to their students.it beggars all description.In addition ,Students have to be well-educated to be a moral human in the future.Besides this ,Schools should arrange many sport activities such as football tournaments,basketball tournaments,volleyball tournaments and more than we could list in order to make students get on well with each other.

To be continued but i guess it's enough for tonight ,thank you in advance

Writing Feedback / Which do you prefer ? To study alone or To study with a group of students? [8]

Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a
group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer.
I agree with the idea of studying alone,because there are so many advantages of studying solo,first of all when studying alone you have the oppurtunity to put aside enough time to revise your project,In addition i don't think that there's something better than study in a peaceful place where no one can disturb you.Whats more it helps you get better results.studying in a peaceful place helps you build your skills.The students who prefer to study with a group of students generally afraid of making mistakes,i have learnt from my mistakes that in order to succeed your desire for success should be greater than you fear the failure.What's more when studying alone you also get the oppurtunity to finish your homeworks or projects on time.When it comes to the idea of studying with a group of students,you don't get any of these oppurtunities.Because everyone comes up with different ideas which can get you confused,also make a lot of noise that may cause distractibility.To sum up i prefer to study alone to help me improve my skills and focus more.