Writing Feedback / IELTS; Technology Vs Survival of Traditional Cultures - Are they incompatible? [3]

IELTS:
It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In today's world nobody can deny the impact of technology on the culture. We are living in a world in which even the smallest aspect of our lives are affected by what technology has offered us. That's why I'm strongly of the opinion that technology and traditional cultures are to some extent incompatible.

Although in some exceptional circumstances there seems to be some level of compatibility between technology and traditional cultures as in Japan for instance, which has been successful in balancing the relationship between the two, there are many reasons that indeed prove the impacts of technology on every culture.

First, in the modern technology, doubtless physical games give themselves place to computer games. Definitely, recent surveys confirm that numbers of people because of the more variety and quality of this type of games that are attracting more and more.

Second, time is the new missing link for today's human. Essentially, you will not have enough time to maintain their religious and social values because of you have many necessary tasks to do that doesn't remain anytime for doing others.

Third, it is almost 40 years since Marshall McLuhan coined the phrase "global village" in his book The Gutenberg Galaxy. He argued that electronic technology was shrinking the planet, which "Time has ceased and space has vanished". Basically, internet led to disappear every real and traditional market by improving e-commerce.

Last, labor saving devices were created for reducing time for more productivity. Do you ever stop to think about the value of your extra time when your washing machine is cleaning your clothes instead of you standing over a tub of water for a few hours? Answer to this question helped human against traditional culture about tasks.

In short, certainly many reasons apply to technology a lot of different and essential effects on every society which you can't take your eyes off.

Writing Feedback / IELTS T 2:A large number of death are caused by road accidents. Why do so many....? [2]

A large number of death are caused by road accidents. Why do so many road accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help to reduce the number of road accidents.

In the today's world, despite of so many attempts are done for reducing number of road accidents, that's inevitable to overlook the truth why increasing simultaneously of the key factors that lead to more accidents. It's interesting to know which developing countries unfortunately are center of mortality due to the road accidents. It seems to me that at least five essential factors are the most important reasons to happen it.

First, the most common road accident is the use of cell phone while driving and answering a phone call could be troublesome. The increasing use of cell phones while driving has caused numerous incidents and has killed so many people in the world.

Second, higher speed increases probability of accident because there is very strong relationship between speed and accident risk. Basically, younger drivers face accidents just for driving too fast and after that loos of control that can make a collision between two cars.

Third, road design is an important component in insuring the safety of our roadways and highways. Poorly designed and built roads can cause many different kinds of car accidents that result in serious injuries. For instance, Iran is the one of ten most dangerous countries for driving in the world which reports high rate of road mortality.

Next, there are many types of vehicle defects, such as a tire blowout, brake failure or other mechanical failure that can be make terrible accident.

Last but not least, low penalty is the essentially factor that encourages every guilty driver to drive fast, call with cellphone, drink alcohol and do other forbidden things while driving.

To conclude with, although transportation and especially driving by cars has a significant key role in our lives, there is at least five key factors that lead to horrible accidents daily. Respect to others and ourselves and be careful while driving and check the car before driving are some things for making your driving safe.