Writing Feedback / TOEFL: job has more effect on your happiness; brings the sense of accomplishment [4]

A/AD, Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does ?

Whether job has more effect on one's happiness than social life is widely discussed. A great number of people are of the opinion that social life has more powerful connection to personal happiness than a job does. However, I strongly contented that employment clearly has the greater effect on happiness for the following reasons.

The most critical reason for such an assertion is that happiness is easy to get if we find the job that we really love and dedicated to it. That is to say, for many people, work is their source of happiness in life. They follow their passions and don't regard what they do as work. Also, their co-workers become one of their friend groups, merging social life and work life into one. What's more, a successful career also helps the person to build up his/her confidence and contentment.

In contrast, there is the popular opinion that although job enables people to realize them personal value and provide economic foundation, social life rather than job can offer the true happiness, which means that person could spend time with their old friends, hanging out together and feels a sense of belonging , while this feeling will never exist in working. There is some truth in this claim, However, this belief fails to consider the face that people usually have to work at least 40 hours every week, and that if we are lucky enough we can hang out with friends a couple of hours on weekends. The majority of lifetime where we attempt to pursue happiness is spent in our workplace rather than in friends' apartments and clubs. People tend to spend more time on their jobs now than their social life.

In sum, although there may be other dissenting views, we can still safely come to the conclusion that job has more effect on your happiness. It brings you the sense of accomplishment and finds your value.

Writing Feedback / 【TOEFL】 Young people now are more willing to help others than those in the past [4]

Whether young people now are more willing to help others is widely discussed. A great number of people are of the opinion that youngsters are more selfish nowadays, they just care the thing what's happened to them. However, I strongly contend that youngsters nowadays are more aggressive to help others.

The most critical reason for such an assertion is that nowadays, young people are more well-educated, know not to take things for granted, and should help others when they are in need. That is to say, youngsters have abundant knowledge which can give several advices to others. Take as an example, Life science, which is a kind of major which cuts across the boundaries of many different disciplines. Those students who major in life science have to learn various subjects such as biochemistry, virology and posology. Although they are not doctor, students still can use this academic knowledge to teach public how to improve their immune system and recognize the pathogenesis.

Additionally, the advance of technology has let young people nowadays see clearly the inequity of the world, and to whom should they lend a helping hand. To further elaborate, youngsters nowadays are more care about social issue. They devote themselves to civic right, focusing on charitable work in combating poverty and inequality. What's more, nowadays there are a lot of different ways young people can offer help, other than financially. The social media enable youth to pay attention to needy people. For example, if a disadvantaged group asks for help by posting on Tweeter, the information may be forwarded and circulated. Thereby, youngsters, one of the main users of Tweeter, are more willing to help the group. Therefore, with the power of the technology such as internet, people more tend to help others.

In sum, although there may be other dissenting views, we still can safely come to the conclusion that according to the high education proportion and advance of technology, youngsters nowadays are more willing to help others than in the past.