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CallMeDoctor

Sep 14, 2013

Undergraduate / I set my value on life for others, which can be compared to "Blue Ocean"; UW-Madison Essay [2]

To be exact, five years and one month ago, the second stage of my life began as I left from my country to go to Malaysia. I had to abandon my family, many of who I loved; friends and everything. I was eager to study English abroad. We study English often in South Korea. English stands out to me more than any of my other classes. I was eager to speak the language fluently so living in America, where English is the main language, would be easy. Sometimes I find myself brave to face these challenges and overcome them. It may sound weird that my parents and I decided to move to Malaysia instead of the United States to study English, but Malaysia has a good environment and many international schools.

I was 16 years old, slightly late to master a foreign language, but still immature to be alone. As a result of having lived far apart from family for several years and missed my country, I began to suffer from an unfortunate felling: Loneliness. I became dependent on my friends, neighbors and the people of my church, but I could not avoid problems and conflicts with them. This made life entirely more difficult for me. ***( It only taught me that no one could keep beside me, fully understanding me.)*** It let me realize that no one was there to listen to me. Ironically, I had many human relations. I have been brought to the painful truth that nobody can fully take others as they are, because people are very much different in terms of their mental state, their interpretation and attitudes.

I was quite hurt to realize that. During the last five years that I have struggled, I have come to a conclusion that I shall be the one who listens to others. I remember how difficult times were when I was alone and failed to find any shelter or anyone who understood me. In those times, what really consoled me was a voice from adversity, which told me to dedicate my life to listening to others who may be suffering from what i once experienced. I felt much easier and relaxed when I realized my life needs to be devoted to helping others.

I set my value on life for others I want to listen to others, understand them and do my best to take them as they are. This is why psychology as my major is important to me so I will be able to pursue my interests in my life.

I went through this essay and edited everything that I thought should be changed, or rephrased. In your sentence " It only taught me that no one could keep beside me, fully understanding me.", I was not sure what you meant by that, so I added parentheses so you could go back and edit it. Other than that, I think it is a decent essay.

Best of luck!
-CMD

CallMeDoctor

Sep 16, 2013

Essays / Simple Question - Just need help on finalizing thesis statement [3]

Although there are many fundamental similarities between Buddhism and Taoism, the belief that the things in life are only an illusion,everything is connected and one should focus on them self to achieve the ultimate goal, which is immortality; these are the teachings and paths that lead to these things differ.

CallMeDoctor

Sep 24, 2013

Undergraduate / World of esoteric ideas; Place or environment where you are perfectly content/ Common App [3]

Hi guys! I am working on my applications for college. This is the prompt for my essay:
Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?

Tell me what you think please, and note if I need to edit/add anything! Thanks :)

The medical field enmeshed me into its world of esoteric ideas. It reinforced my dreams of being able to take care of people. At the coming age of young adulthood, I began volunteering at my local hospital. After spending a full year there, my horizons had been broadened, and my interests became focused on surgery. With my determination to see the walls of an operating room, I sought out people to help me make this happen. With success, I began observing surgeries of different specialties. In general, I watched several hernia repairs consisting of inguinal, ventral and umbilical locations, an exploratory laparotomy, a collectomy, several laproscopic cholecystectomies, and multiple laproscopic appendectomies. I was able to palpitate a newly removed gallbladder in the laproscopic cholestectomy, and felt the gallstones within it. When I observed orthopedic surgery, I saw a total knee replacement and learned about a new navigation system a surgeon can use to assist with measuring prosthesis's, and a minimally invasive lami/disectomy when I shadowed neurology. I observed a left carotid endarterectomy while observing a vascular surgery, and watched as the doctor used ultrasound imaging to locate plaque built up in the artery. I pointed out the vocal cords and identified the epiglottis while an anesthesiologist used a Glide Scope to intubate a patient. While in the operating room, I was treated as an equal of the doctors, nurses, PA-C's medical students, and residents. The doctors would address questions towards me just like they would medical students. They taught me how to read CAT scans, review patient charts and answered all of the questions I had. The operating room was a place that everyone knew my name, and would go out of their way to explain operations to me. They made me know that I was one of them, just slightly younger and in high school. This summer experience helped me transfigure my dreams into goals because off all the support I received from the people I look up to.

CallMeDoctor

Oct 14, 2013

Undergraduate / The hospital is a place where I have always felt comfortable; The Flying of A Dream [2]

Possible titles:
The Flying of A Dream
Scrubbing In
Peace, Love and Scrubs

The hospital is a place where I have always felt comfortable. At the coming age of young adulthood, I began volunteering at my local hospital. Working there broadened my mind of the medical field, and introduced me to many different specialties of medicine. After being there for approximately one year, I had met and shadowed doctors of all specialties except surgery: the specialty that had appealed to me most. With my determination to see the walls of an operating room, I sought out people that could help me make that possible. Successfully, I began observing surgeries of different specialties. I watched cases in specialties of general, orthopedics, neurology, vascular and anesthesia. General stood out to me the most. I was allowed to shadow a general surgery resident to get a feel of what my future would hopefully be like. This resident became my mentor for a week. During this time span, he taught me how to identify the organs on CAT scans and what to look for when searching for abnormalities. At the end of the week, he had me examine a scan and explain what the abnormality of the abdomen was, and how to proceed. From the scan, I concluded the patient had acute appendicitis, or an inflamed appendix, and needed a laparoscopic appendectomy to remove the diseased organ. He questioned my choice to test my confidence. I reassured him by explaining how the contrast was apparent in the appendix, and appeared slightly enlarged compared to the size of a healthy appendix. The resident performed the surgery later that day with his attending.

Working in an operating room is surprisingly peaceful. It's not like Grey's Anatomy where the patient codes every five seconds. The doctor is relaxed and confident about the procedure they are doing. While in the OR, the doctor leading the procedure would ask me question or ask me to identify an organ. They treated me like a medical student, and respected me. Nurses taught me how to fill out patient charts, and what questions to ask when visiting the patient pre/post operation. At the end of the summer, all of my questions were answered. The operating room became a place that was familiar. The staff let me know I was one of them, just slightly younger, and in high school. My summer experience helped me transfigure my dreams into goals from all of the support I received from these inspirational people I look up to.

Please help me :) This is due November 1st.