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Name: sanmeet atwal
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SammieA   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Stanford Supplement/ Special Olympics/ or just Olympics [2]

Hey everyone, would appreciate some feedback, no matter how harsh! Thanks!

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150 word limit.)

Sports have always been a big part of my life. Once I heard about Special Olympics, an organization that helps over 13,000 athletes with disabilities, I immediately became an active volunteer throughout high school. One of my most profound experiences occurred during junior year. I remember coaching and cheering for a basketball team comprised of 10 year olds, who all had a mental disability. Like my little brother, they loved to play basketball. The only difference was that they were diagnosed with learning disabilities and struggled to do day-to-day tasks because of them. It was evident that the court was one of the places where they were able to experience the joy of being involved in a team and feel supported by the community. I will remember coaching and teaching them for the rest of my life because I felt an immense joy spreading cheer to these young kids' lives.
SammieA   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / growing up with a sibling - stanford supplement letter to roomate [7]

Hey!
Love the message that you're trying to convey, but some parts of your essay may come off as a little harsh: 'my brother was a burden'

maybe reword these types of phrases a little, or just sum it up with a phrase like 'sibling rivalry'
you want to sound positive and welcoming, so maybe focus more on how you became independent and responsible, and how you turned a negative situation and turned it into a positive impact on your life. Focus more on YOU and the type of person you are!

Would love some feedback on mine as well!
SammieA   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Stanford Supplements- The "Teacher"; "Debater"; "Collector"; and "Worker" [7]

supplement 1: it's good, if you still have room for words you should elaborate more on what motivated you to help these young students
supplement 2: you can take away details about how bills are made and passed etc, but i think you should add what you took from that experience and if it motivated you to do anything etc.

supplement 3: my favorite, it captures your life and your personality and i love it!
supplement 4: i think you should stick with this idea because it captures your love for you mom, and i can tell you're being honest and genuine about it. and after 'numerous' you should add 'strands or amounts'

would love some feedback on mine as well!
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