Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Posts by enique94
Name: Diamond Washington
Joined: Dec 29, 2013
Last Post: Dec 30, 2013
Threads: 1
Posts: 4  
From: United States of America
School: UCF

Displayed posts: 5
sort: Oldest first   Latest first  | 
enique94   
Dec 29, 2013
Scholarship / perusing a Biomedical Science.. Scholarship essay for UCF's faculty and staff association [5]

I know there is more to add however I don't know what else should be added. I want to make it more personal but I don't want to go off topic. PLEASE HELP.

How will this scholarship allow you to positively contribute the UCF community? Please include specific examples of how you will be able to impact the campus by receiving this scholarship in your essay.

As a student perusing a Biomedical Science degree I posses the qualities of a determined, goal oriented young woman. While at UCF I've been extremely interested in the club International Medical Outreach (IMO). The mission of IMO is to organize educational medical trips volunteering for people not fortunate enough to receive basic medical necessities . For every semester trip we have to raise money to fund our transportation and stay. This scholarship will not only allow me to help the UCF community but also enable me to positively contribute to the many countries that IMO visits like Haiti, Ecuador, Costa-Rica, San Pedro Sula, and Honduras.
enique94   
Dec 29, 2013
Undergraduate / Botson and Careerlink - BU MY DREAM SCHOOL [4]

Being that you can't have too many words try to briefly describe the "other interest" in which that major will help you with.
enique94   
Dec 30, 2013
Undergraduate / "Behind the Camera, Behind a laptop" - Extracurricular Activity Essay [2]

It sounds as if you are on your way! The only my only suggestion work on keeping everything in the present tense( this makes it sound more exciting).

Example:
At times I failed to capture some shots, and that's when I learned to make the most of what I had.

Times when I fail to capture some shots is when I learn to make the most of what I have.

Its not a very easy thing to do, I even struggle with it in my essays.

I hope this helps and Good LUCK!
Do You Need
Academic Writing
or Editing Help?
Need professional help with your assignments? Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳