AlanWakeMax
Feb 16, 2014
Graduate / Letter of Motivation - program in Management / social sciences, law and business [7]
Hello.
I need to write a motivational letter to study abroad. As I know, I need to describe my best qualities in an essay form and reasons for going abroad, not like a fiction art story and not very stereotypical too. There are no strict limitations or instructions given for the amount of words and other things, but I have a brief note of what should I include in the letter.
Hopefully I can get some feedback and comments on grammar, logical structure and links, as well as some advice of how to write this type of letters.
The prompt:
- why do you choose this particular university/program;
- goals of studying abroad;
- mission/tasks of studying abroad;
- what results do you expect (social, academic, professional, etc.);
- explain the pros of choosing you as a candidate to study on this program.
The letter
Once upon a time, when I was 6, it was a rainy summer day and I needed to get on the 16th floor of an apartment house. There were two elevators, a passenger elevator and a heavy weights elevator. I pushed the elevator button, and soon the bigger one came down to me, so I stepped in and pressed the button "16". The doors closed but the lights turned off and the box didn't start to go up. I was very scared, panic seized me and I started crying and screaming for help. That was a nightmare. That was my first ever English lesson.
For the whole year after the incident I was using the stairs to reach my teacher's apartment on the top floor. Looking back now I see a little boy with a big desire to achieve the goals he had set up. I've been learning English for 12 years already, and I have always tried to find out something new. During my last couple of years at high school I was required to choose a university to apply to after graduation. Since I wanted to work in a big multinational corporation or even start my own business, and instead of Maths, Chemistry or Physics I enjoyed Sociology and History, I decided to enter Management department at [my current uni].
Though I was not sure whether I had made the right choice, after more than two years of studying I can undoubtedly state that I'm completely satisfied with my education here. And now there is a possibility to study abroad - my dream comes true! There is hardly a single European capital I haven't visited, so when I saw the list of countries I could move (travel? go?) to, (there was) one word that immediately catched up my attention: [xxx]. This country itself is very variegated (as well as being the convergence of cultures?). Since there are many international students of various nations studying there, it will be a golden opportunity for me to learn about different cultures.
Among many [xxx] universities, I am strongly impressed by [yyy] due to being the largest social sciences, law and business university in Europe. The [zzz] program will provide me with both theoretical and practical management skills and also will give me an intercultural review of global business, which would increase my chances to get a better job in the future. The unique experience of foreign education will definitely improve my knowledge of English, especially speaking and writing skills. Moreover, I think it is going to be so fun trying to teach the students some Russian words, and hopefully I could pick up (acquire?) a bit of [xxx lang] as well.
However, it might sound dishonest if I say that education is the one and only reason to go to [xxx]. Of course there are plenty of other things which I'm really looking forward to. I aim to establish a network with many international students in order to stay in touch, help each other and probably have a possibility to work together in future. Furthermore, I will make new friends and spend (have?) a great time during my academic and extracurricular activities. What's more, I'm fond of travelling and suppose I could visit some other EU's countries if I had a chance.
P.S. Things in brackets are the ones which i'm not sure about. Any idea how to conclude it? Probably say that I'm very attentive and careful man etc. so I would be a great canditate?
Hello.
I need to write a motivational letter to study abroad. As I know, I need to describe my best qualities in an essay form and reasons for going abroad, not like a fiction art story and not very stereotypical too. There are no strict limitations or instructions given for the amount of words and other things, but I have a brief note of what should I include in the letter.
Hopefully I can get some feedback and comments on grammar, logical structure and links, as well as some advice of how to write this type of letters.
The prompt:
- why do you choose this particular university/program;
- goals of studying abroad;
- mission/tasks of studying abroad;
- what results do you expect (social, academic, professional, etc.);
- explain the pros of choosing you as a candidate to study on this program.
The letter
Once upon a time, when I was 6, it was a rainy summer day and I needed to get on the 16th floor of an apartment house. There were two elevators, a passenger elevator and a heavy weights elevator. I pushed the elevator button, and soon the bigger one came down to me, so I stepped in and pressed the button "16". The doors closed but the lights turned off and the box didn't start to go up. I was very scared, panic seized me and I started crying and screaming for help. That was a nightmare. That was my first ever English lesson.
For the whole year after the incident I was using the stairs to reach my teacher's apartment on the top floor. Looking back now I see a little boy with a big desire to achieve the goals he had set up. I've been learning English for 12 years already, and I have always tried to find out something new. During my last couple of years at high school I was required to choose a university to apply to after graduation. Since I wanted to work in a big multinational corporation or even start my own business, and instead of Maths, Chemistry or Physics I enjoyed Sociology and History, I decided to enter Management department at [my current uni].
Though I was not sure whether I had made the right choice, after more than two years of studying I can undoubtedly state that I'm completely satisfied with my education here. And now there is a possibility to study abroad - my dream comes true! There is hardly a single European capital I haven't visited, so when I saw the list of countries I could move (travel? go?) to, (there was) one word that immediately catched up my attention: [xxx]. This country itself is very variegated (as well as being the convergence of cultures?). Since there are many international students of various nations studying there, it will be a golden opportunity for me to learn about different cultures.
Among many [xxx] universities, I am strongly impressed by [yyy] due to being the largest social sciences, law and business university in Europe. The [zzz] program will provide me with both theoretical and practical management skills and also will give me an intercultural review of global business, which would increase my chances to get a better job in the future. The unique experience of foreign education will definitely improve my knowledge of English, especially speaking and writing skills. Moreover, I think it is going to be so fun trying to teach the students some Russian words, and hopefully I could pick up (acquire?) a bit of [xxx lang] as well.
However, it might sound dishonest if I say that education is the one and only reason to go to [xxx]. Of course there are plenty of other things which I'm really looking forward to. I aim to establish a network with many international students in order to stay in touch, help each other and probably have a possibility to work together in future. Furthermore, I will make new friends and spend (have?) a great time during my academic and extracurricular activities. What's more, I'm fond of travelling and suppose I could visit some other EU's countries if I had a chance.
P.S. Things in brackets are the ones which i'm not sure about. Any idea how to conclude it? Probably say that I'm very attentive and careful man etc. so I would be a great canditate?