Writing Feedback / Modern parents are more devoted to their children's education than parents in the past. [4]

The way of humankind's life has changed from the past. People, nowadays, demand higher quality of life whereas people from the past strived to survive. Since education plays a key factor in one's success, more parents are pushing their children to attend university than in the past. I personally believe that modern parents are more devoted to their children's education than parents in the past. There are couple reasons and examples to support my idea.

To begin with, importance of education has increased over time. Today's society is full of competition. In other words, university education is often considered to be mandatory for successful life. Companies look for applicants with higher education than ever before. Accordingly, parents, who love their children the most, pay close attention to send their kids to one of the great universities. For example, my parents always told me to do well on the test because that was the only way to achieve my goal which is to become an architect. At that time, the pressures from the parents seemed to be unbearable, however, considering that I realize the importance of education now, I would do the same to my children.

Next, education is equal to everyone. Education was considered to be luxurious thing in the past. Only wealthy people were able to receive education and common people, especially women, had no chance be educated. As a result, parents showed no effort in teaching their children. However, the society has changed over time and, now, everyone can freely receive the education that he/she demands. Parents, nowadays, spend time with their children consulting their future plans and assist them with their future education. For instance, my grandmother was unable to attend school because she had to work in the farm ever since she was old enough to attend school. However, she still knew the importance of education and she sent all her children to finish schools including university education.

To sum up, I believe that more parents today are involved in their children's education because they realize that education is really important and they are also able to provide education to their kids.

umm.. i couldnt really think about what to write but i tried my best to write in 30 minutes. :P

Writing Feedback / TOEFL :Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often make them more complicated [2]

topic : Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often turns out to make them more complicated.

Many people think they are blessed to be in the era of high technology. With newly developing technologies, people are able to carry various tasks more convenient and easy. For example, we no longer have to travel to DMV to renew our driver's license or drive to bank for sending money. Ancient people would probably think that we are like magicians. However, even with all the conveniences, we would have to admit that technologies made our lives more complicated. There are couple reasons and examples to support my answer.

Of course, new technologies are always great. However, it takes time for people to adapt them. Since we are informed with devices that are produced with new features nearly every day, many people often get lost. For instance, I use new Iphone which I personally think is great. However, even though I used it for couple months, I still do not know how to use all the features proficiently. At first, I tried to go through all the instructions but, soon, I gave up because I found out that it is time-consuming and there are too many things to learn.

Next, technology destroys the language. Ever since people used computers or cellphones to chat with others, they created their own language to communicate. Because people try to type as fast as they are talking, they use a lot of abbreviations and broken language. This has gotten worse with twitter, myspace, and facebook. What are even worse, young people who are still in the early ages are exposed to them and impeded by the newly developed inventions. To clarify, my younger brother does not know how to spell the words correctly and he talks to his friends with terms that I have never heard of. I have tried to correct him for couple times but he just thinks that I am too conservative.

Although technologies allowed us to have a convenient life, it has made our lives more chaotic according to the reasons mentioned above.

can anyone help me with my conclusion? i couldnt come up with a great conclusion since i only have 30minutes to write this.
please help! :)