Writing Feedback / TOEFL: 'reach the zenith' Some people prefer to work for a large company. [3]

The topic of discussion at hand is controversial, that is, some people penchant working in small companies but others don't. Working in small companies have it's positive sides, however it fails to compete with the benefits of working in large companies. Working in prodigious companies have many advantages and in this essay I will present two of them.

First and foremost, more money is gained. Large companies often spread their stocks not only nationally but also to foreign countries. Therefore, large company worker's income is inevitably higher than those of small ones. To take my uncle as an illustration, he currently works in a renowned company called Samsung. His job is to apprise other countries of their company's products. Although it is a dreading job, the money he gains at the end of the month compensates the unimaginable toil. He told me that the former company he worked on, which was a small private one, did not offer this much income he is currently gaining. This shows how big companies are more preferable than small ones.

In addition, one is able to obtain more advanced skills. This is due to the fact that large companies are often awfully competitive. Since there are countless people working on the same compartment, being distinctive is essential. To become conspicuous, one will endeavor with full effort to 'stand out' among others. To take another example of my uncle, as mentioned earlier, he works for Samsung. He often tells me how hard he has to work to be promoted. Working night shifts has become his ordinary lifestyle, however, he says it is mandatory in getting a promotion. He stated that everyday his ability in the field increases and expects to become the best at his work. This phenomenon could not happen in the smooth and less rigid environment of small companies.

In conclusion, I have stated two reasons supporting my standpoint. More money is earned working in stupendous companies and one's skill is bound to reach the zenith sooner or later. Although the jury may be out, as far as I'm concerned, I believe the two rationales above are sufficiently convincing enough to support the majority of people who are also in favor of my claim.

Writing Feedback / 'our life would be easier'; government's money for improving computer technology [3]

Topic: Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible on improving computer technology. Other people disagree and think governments should spend this money on our basic needs on Earth. Which of these two opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Basic needs are important in our society in order to properly prosper and proliferate in this world. However, considering the world's current situation, improving computer technology will be more advantageous and beneficial to people. In this essay I will present two reasons supporting my perspective.

First of all, an improved computer technology will inevitably make our lives easier. Our current society is teeming with computers and electronic devices. In the near future, due to advanced technology, more computers will be developed and placed in the house of many citizens. Therefore, improving computer technology will make the lives of billions of people easy and fast. For example, the current computer system does not have the function to recognize human's voice. Voice recognition could be useful in that it could hasten the time used in searching or typing. However, major companies such as Samsung or LG have not shown much process in implementing voice recognition due to the spate of money. Thus, more money spent on improvements of computer technology will improve the quality of life.

In addition, improvement in computer technology would eradicate current computer problems. Although modern computers seem impeccable and flawless, an in depth observation proves it wrong. My experience is a perfect example to illustrate our current computer problems. I was doing an important project on my computer few months ago. The project was worth more than 50 percent of my grade. So, I worked every day to receive a decent grade. However, in the process of finishing my project, the computer shut down without any warning. When I rebooted my computer, the project was completely gone. I fell into despair along with an F on my report card. Improvements on computer technology in the future will prevent these unnecessary situations from happening.

In conclusion I have stated two reasons supporting my viewpoint. First reason is that our life would be easier and the other reason is it could remove current computer issues. Considering the two reasons, I believe money should be spent on computer technology instead of basic needs.