Writing Feedback / IELTS - homework to students everyday - 'intersection between home and school' [4]

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Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

Designating homework is very important to every individual. It helps us to understand the topic more deeply. In my opinion, allowing assignments everyday gives a better relationship between students, teachers and parents. In this essay I will share some purposes why homework is necessary.

Homework is the intersection between home and school. It also serves as the window in which it can observe children's education and positive attitudes. For teachers, it is the effective way to provide additional instruction in practice. One purpose is by practice and participation in learning skills. For example, when I was a student, my Math teacher gave us homework about Math problems and formulas daily. I cannot stop solving and looking for another strategies to find the right answers. I feel not contented if I did not finish my homework. As I am doing it habitually I develop skills which I can use to solve the problems so easily even if I am in class. This principle is the most important because it improves child's achievement and increase mastery of academic skills.

Secondarily, bringing assignments in home, gather and organizing needed materials, returning it and receiving a grade, strengthens the sense of responsibility of students. Like in Art Class, when teacher gave a pupil a project. He/she will carry out this task and make it beautiful to achieve a good grade, and submitting it on the right time will possibly get a higher mark, this is where the third purpose enter, the time management. Developing personal skills such as time management gained by completing the job on time.

In conclusion, Homework is a bridge that joins schools and parents. School offers homework to let parents know what children are learning. In school, it monitor the student's independent progress. For parents, they gain a greater appreciation of education and express positive attitude towards their children's success.

Writing Feedback / Too many subjects or specialize in one, which is better? [3]

Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better?

Knowledge is for peoples own benefit. Universities nowadays demand students to take many subjects while some specialize in one. Both this aspect has its own viewpoint. I believe, taking many subjects is better than being expert in one.

Firstly, specializing in one thing brings professionalism and practical use of knowledge to people. A doctor for example, being a physician is a very broad profession and yet there are many criteria that an individual may choose for them to become expert in one field. When a student doctor decided to be skillful in his chosen field, he/she must focus and expose himself to gain more information and be master on the particular area. However, information becomes beneficial when a person is able to use it.

In contrary, a students who knows many subjects have a lot of advantage in job hunting rather than students knows only one. Since most of the students have no practical experience, having broad knowledge can win more attention to employers. In our modern society, most of the job offer require employee who occupy a lot of knowledge. For instance, I as a nurse is a very huge profession because you must know a lot. As part of our curriculum I need to study some of subjects like chemistry, pharmacology and even nutrition and diet. I don't need to be expert in this subjects, but I must have an idea about it. For having knowledge to this different curriculum I have more chances to apply in laboratories, drugstores and in restaurant even if it is not my field of duty.

In conclusion, a student who has a pack of knowledge, has a greater advantage for his/her own future. Presumably employers would choose someone who has more skills and talents. Being flexible is somewhat a profit to any individual.

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