Writing Feedback / To be successful in studying, students should have a good method to learn effectively. [6]

Some student like to study alone while others like to study in group

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To be successful in studying, students should have a good method to learn effectively. Besides studying from teachers, they should study from their friends or by their own. The habits of studying are often much related to personal preferences. Some students find themselves study better when they are study alone, while others would love to study in a group. And it is for sure that both of them have their own advantages. To me, studying alone is better than studying in a group because students can focus on their job and be independent from others as being alone.

First of all, studying alone offers students a highly focus on their job. If students study alone, they can absolutely concentrate on their exercises without any distraction, which can help them understand the lessons easily and quickly. Moreover, when students focus on their exercises, they can save amount of time. Studying without others people around, students do not have a shot at doing nonsense such as chatting, laughing. If they study in a group of many members, it is for sure that they will take at least some minutes to talk nonsense about their day, their neighbor, their lover, etc, for example. Hence, it is not effectively if students work with many people but they do not take seriously.

Furthermore, students can be more independent from others if they know how to study by themselves. When studying, students may have a lot of questions and hard exercises; if nobody is around them, they have to think and deal with the exercises by themselves, which can give them a great opportunity to improve their skill to deal with the problem. In addition, studying alone makes students think independently. They are not distracted by others opinion. Students themselves have a chance to raise their ideas, which is sense of freedom; thus, they can have a shot at finding themselves, and they can work as single person on any projects in the future. Besides, when students themselves can find out their answers for the questions, they will remember the lessons for a long time.

In short, studying alone will give students opportunities to seriously focus on their job and to be more independent, which rarely offer in group. Just find your own method by yourselves and follow your idea. "The best part about being alone is that you really don't have to answer to anybody. You do what you want."- Justin Timberlake.

Writing Feedback / IELTS- CAPITAL PUNISHMENT; 51% countries have polished death penalty [5]

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topic: Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

"Capital punishment or the death penalty is a legal process whereby a person is put to death by the state as a punishment for a crime." In recently years, many countries have polished the law of the death penalty. In the whole world, 51% countries have polished death penalty; even, it is at 98% in Europe. Some people claim that without this punishment our lives would be less secure and crimes of violence would increase. However, others argue that it is not essential to control violence in society by the death penalty. Personally, I think it is no evidence about the reduction of crime rates due to the death penalty because of many reasons.

Firstly, capital punishment is a form of revenge which creates violent culture. Crimes kill someone which is illegal; nevertheless, the government use law to punish them, which is the same way they sinned but in a legal one. As a fact that the criminal is repeated second time; also, it is regarded as the "legalized revenge" to victims' family. Hence, death penalty neither controls the violent in society nor creates a violent culture.

Secondly, nobody has the right to take another human life. It is undeniable that the rights of life are the basic and vital rights of a human being. No one has the right to take the life of a human; even if he committed murder. If you kill a criminal, you become a criminal. Moreover, if we think that killing is the best way to solve the problem, it is neither unethical nor immoral. In short, crimes seem to increase due to the capital punishment.

Finally, with some of serious criminals, capital punishment is an easy way out. Criminals should be punished for their misdeeds. If they kill someone and end their life by dead without paying for their sins, it is so easy for them. They do not undergo any pain or misery. Why do not we have other wisely punishments? As we can see some industries such as mining, oil and gas extraction, reclamation, etc, needs many labors. Why do not punish them by doing something meaningful for the country- it is better. Moreover, rehabilitation and education is also a better way in order to prevent or minimize offensive acts.

To conclude, capital punishment is a form of legalized revenge, it is an easy way for serious crimes, and nobody has rights to take others life; thus, it neither demines crimes of violence nor be essential to control violence in society. The world should consider clearly about polishing the law of the dead penalty.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences [4]

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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. I personally feel that abortion should be illegal because of its affection on mother's mental and physical and the humanity.

Affection on mother's mental and physical is one reason explains why abortion should be illegal. Abortion causes women's poor health and their shorter life as well. Besides, abortion is a dangerous process which can lead to the loss of women fertility or an increase of miscarriage; even in some serious situation, the mother can die. Moreover, abortion also effect on the mother's mental due to some complications such as damaged cervix, hemorrhage, etc.

A more important, abortion should be banned because of the humanity feature. When a mother decides to have abortion means she makes a decision of taking a human being, ending a new life and killing their own child. Though it is a fetus, it is still living and it has all rights to live. Abortion is not different from the act of murders. In short, abortion breaks humanity feature of human beings.

All in all, the affection on mother's mental and physical and the humanity prove that abortion should be illegal. People should think of the consequences before having abortion.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: why do people attend college; 'it offers much more than life preparation' [4]

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topic: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge) why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

College or university is a primitive choice of many students nowadays. For them, college is a crucial step into their future life which provides them with many opportunities in life and each of them has different reasons to attend the college. In my point of view, people attend college or university for their career preparation, new experiences and increased knowledge.

First and foremost, career preparation is one of vital reasons for going to college. The world is changing rapidly and our life has become more and more competitive; even a very simple job with low salary attracts hundreds of candidates. Thus, students who go to college open up more choices for their career. Moreover, higher education can help them build up a better job because in hi-tech world, most of job requires more brain power than muscle power. Everyone desires to have a good job, and college give them a chance to acquire it.

Beside career preparation, students attend college because they want to have new experiences. For many, attending college gives them a shot at living their own life for which they have to arrange everything by themselves. In addition, in college environment, they have a gold opportunities to learn how to cooperate with others, how to handle problems, how to be a good leader and others skills.

Last but not least, college is a good environment to acquire knowledge. In college, students will be taught both theory and practice which will broaden their knowledge in their field to become professional. There are a variety of resources, provided by most college, to help them through college, including professor, professional, Doctor of Philosophy and so on. In short, students' knowledge will turn to a new chapter by studying in college.

In a word, college or university gives students a shot at preparing for their career, experiencing new things and increasing knowledge. College or university help students' life turn over a new leaf. Hence, if anyone is burning an ambition of being a college student, they should try their best to make it become true because college offers much more than life preparation.

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