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Aug 7, 2014
Undergraduate / SAT - Some of the heroes get forgotten because they probably didn't affect directly people's lives [3]

Prompt:
Time has a doomsday book, on whose pages he is continually recording illustrious names. But as often as a new name is written there, an old one disappears. Only a few stand in illuminated characters never to be effaced.

Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Assignment:
Are there some heroes who will be remembered forever? Or are all heroes doomed to be forgotten one day? Plan your response, and then write an essay to explain your views on this issue. Be sure to support your position with specific points and examples. (You may use personal examples or examples from your reading, observations, or, knowledge of subjects such as history, literature, science.)

Please rate it from 1 to 6. It probably sucks, but this was the first time I'm training for the essay. It is also such a short time you have for writing, you can barely proofread!

MY ESSAY:
Many times we come to wonder whether it's worth it or not to benefit someone or some people, since we'll most likely be forgotten in a couple of years, maybe months, right? It is tempting to follow this stream of thoughts, since it's the easiest path: you won't have to bend yourself backwards for someone else. Despite that, you are probably better off helping people in general, since it's a much more rewarding experience.

I, for example, have always taken my studies seriously. Do all my tasks, got all my assignments prepared way before the deadline. On top of that, I'm very social, so I like to hang with all my classmates, from brainy to not-so-clever ones. It is no surprise that I tend to catch the eyes, sometimes, of some self-centered mates that want to become friends just tfor me to help them study.

I've had, indeed, many opportunities to turn them down, but I did not, and here's why: I feel it's best to contribute to the world and not ask for anything back. You'll just get this feeling of having done your part; you're creating a better world. I realised that, after some time, all the people I'd helped became even nicer to me than they were before, and that lasts to this day.

Although some of the heroes get forgotten, I believe that is so because they probably didn't affect directly people's lives, although benefiting them in a long term. Now, when you do something good directly to someone, that will last, and you'll probably be reminded as someone helpful, and if you've made such contribution, even a hero.

That's definitely something that makes me keep my faith in humanity, with the belief that people do good things will receive good things as well, and, in my opinion, that's what has made the world progress to this day.

Thank You!!!
luisfl97   
Aug 27, 2014
Undergraduate / I gave my hand to a helpless man - Common App Belief essay [5]

Everything had been taken care off, ranging from medical care and food to a place for him to live.

Watch out, I think you actually mean "taken care OF", right?

I really enjoyed your essay. The writing and language are very clear, and it's also an amazing story, definitely eye-catching. It's a great example of how you'd be somebody who could make a difference to the world.

I understand how this essay could be seen as a story about "challenging a belief or idea", but, as vangiespen, I also think it's more suitable for "accomplishment that marked your transition...". You shouldn't have much trouble adapting it to this topic, just add in a few more lines that show this experience has made you grown.

Just out of curiosity, was this based on real events or just out of your imagination? Either way, good job!
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