JuniorR
Nov 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members [3]
Hi Vns9x,
I believe that you need to explain in the introduction if you agree or disagree with statement because it is not clear to the reader your opinion about topic until conclusion. Maybe you could write something like "Although, some persons think that travel in a group led by a tour guide is the best way to travel, in my view...
I am not totally comfortable in give you a score, but I would rate your essay with a score 3 of 5...
Jr
Although, it is better to travel in a group led by a tour guide. However, travelling that way
Hi Vns9x,
I believe that you need to explain in the introduction if you agree or disagree with statement because it is not clear to the reader your opinion about topic until conclusion. Maybe you could write something like "Although, some persons think that travel in a group led by a tour guide is the best way to travel, in my view...
I am not totally comfortable in give you a score, but I would rate your essay with a score 3 of 5...
Jr