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Name: Monowara Bdgum
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Last Post: Nov 26, 2014
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Nov 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Youth crime are increasing rapidly around the world. What are the reasons & suggest solution [2]

Nowadays intensity of youth crime are most familiar phenomenon throughout the world. It is significantly going up day by day. Now its prime time to be aware about youth crime and take initiatives to diminish this type activity.

However there are some strong reasons behind youth crime need to be discussed. The most vital reasons for the demand which can be initially mentioned is that weak family bondage. At present our family are very small and parents are too busy for their business or job. They have no times for their kids and their are no other family member such as grandparents or uncle aunt who can support these kids. Some of these family are broken or parents are separated, for this result kids become more lonely and desperate to do anything and very likely they involve themselves in drug or other illegal activities. What's more there are no such ideal person to whom adolescent or teenage can follow or build their future life. They motivate by rock star or other young craze who are not really ideal to follow. A further point is that technology which is easily available to modern age and youngster are very susceptible to available technology, they merely follow the discretion of technology. For explaining this point, some video games are too violent and unintentionally drive the user to terrified and bloody activities.

Therefore, there are some quite key suggestions which should be practice to control the youth crime. What can be cited first regarding this is improve family bindings. Parents should know about children whereabouts, spend more times with kids and involve them to productive schedule. Another important idea that can not but be pointed out is that society might establish some idealistic guidelines and examples to follow. Last but not least provide children more playground and motivate them to outdoor sports and other social activity not only depend on them video game or digital social networking.

In fine taking all the aforementioned points of the given topic matter into account I personally opine that youth crime will be eliminated from the society. (Academic IELTS Tusk 2 writing practice)
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Nov 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / Nowadays people are valued by their social rank or materialistic activity - IELTS essay [4]

A persons worth nowadays seems to be judge accroding to social stutus and material possessions. Old fashioned value such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seem important. Agree or disagree (IELTS writing task 2)

Nowadays people are valued by their social rank or materialistic activity. At present personal positive senses such as respect. kind heart, belief are now backward or unprofessional attitude in modern society. Some people like me still believe in mans for inner quality.

On one hand it would be wrong if social status and material possessions are fully be ignored. Social rank should be maintained for social stability for example teacher should be respected by students, parents should be obeyed by kids. Further point is that material possessions could be indicator of financial solvency not materialism craziness. If anyone has ability to buy big posh house and latest car they can have it but it should not be like that to maintain one's status, mad to buy any electric gazettes or latest car instead or debt or corruption.

On the other hand, their are some quite plausible reasons why people should be adored by their valued inner quality no matter where or when it is. The most vital point for this regard is morality is the main fundamental factor to sustain our society according to history. If society forget to practice individual positive quality then it would be full with fight, blood , terrorism etc. Society will be imbalance only muscle power will win. Responsibility, respect teach how to survive as team not alone. What's more People should be evaluated by their education and positive characteristics . Educated and well character people able to prosper our society by their knowledge and research technology and lead the society to sustainability.

In a nutshell taking all the aforementioned points into account I personally opine that persons worth might be judge by their humanitarian quality not by their materialism.
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