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Posts by tomurcuk
Name: hilal v
Joined: Apr 12, 2015
Last Post: Apr 14, 2015
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tomurcuk   
Apr 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features [3]

_______Every thing is in the cycle of constant changing.Some technological tools such as computersi televisions, or phones are being generated and developed. Scientists or technicians are trying to improve things that they have produced. One of the things that is starting to become more smart and productive is smartphones. Due to the fact that everyone can puchase one of them, smart phones are in every part of our lives. That it will ring some advantages and disadvantages is a clear fact.

______Initially, one advantage of smart phones is that they are quite convenience. Smart phones can be used as a computer now so that people can work out their any type of problems with these phones. Also, it makes people's lives easy because using a smart phone, with one "click", a lot of thins can be done.Thanks to the smart phones, images or e-mail can be sent and received. Moreover, some social networking websites can be reached easily. In addition to this, in case an emergency, because of their accessibility, smart phones can be very beneficial. These advantages of using a samrt phone are very essential in today's people's eyes

_______As a disadvantage of smart phones, health hazards can be stated. because of the including radioactivite materials, they may cause some health problems such as herat and kidney damage, cancer, or fatigue. Another disadvantage is that drivers are using these phones while they are driving. Most drivers disregard that using a phone is dangerous during driving but it is a disractive factor which may cause accidents and even deaths. The other disadvantage which may affect people's lives negatively is that every smart phone brings an ignition risk at places with combustible materials such as gas station. This is a very important thing that people should be careful. These advantages may have a negative impact on people's lives.

______As a result, the producing and developing of phones have som positive and negative features which can make people's lives easier ır create a dangerous circumstance for people.
tomurcuk   
Apr 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Should people invent a new language? [2]

*Having united language areis an important element for universal language...

*such as people must pay a course and learn grammar properly. .. ı think that after such as, we cant use a new sentence. if you want to write a full sentence, then use "for example" or "for instance"

*Secondly, people can improve their jobs prospect and it would change their lifelives automatically.

*For this reason, many companies whowhich plan ...

* i think you should continue in this sentence: In addition,experience with new culturein addition to experiene with new cultures, ....(a sentence)

***these are the things what i found as a mistake :)
tomurcuk   
Apr 13, 2015
Writing Feedback / The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features [3]

thank you so much for your feedback
and yes ı had misspelled the "i"..
actually, ı was going to talk about just advantages and disadvantages of smart phones. ı just wanted to add the words "producing and developing"..

ı wrote this essay very quickly, so ı am sorry the words that ı misspelled. :)
thank you for all comments and advices..
tomurcuk   
Apr 13, 2015
Student Talk / How do you define a good writer or a beginner writer? [7]

a good writer can surprise us with the things that he wrote and olso his writings has a fluency . I think, if his sentences remain in my mind, i can say that he is a good writer. but of course all the features of a good writer are not these..
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